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You in Black and White
Inside of me
Remains
Your likeness
A moment
Stopped
A spot
Without a clock
In my thoughts
A place
Time forgot
And
In that place
I see
Your face
In love
Your snapshot
That used to be
Framed
Cropped
And stutter-stepped
Like an old-time movie
You
And although
Obscured
Remembered
Only fragments
Monochrome
And eclipsed
In black and white
Your image
Lingers
You
A
Photograph
My passion felt
Your contour
Choreograph
Dancing in the strobe
Your outline
Forever
Next to me
You
I will not forget
You
In shadow
Black and white
You
In silhouette
Remains
Your likeness
A moment
Stopped
A spot
Without a clock
In my thoughts
A place
Time forgot
And
In that place
I see
Your face
In love
Your snapshot
That used to be
Framed
Cropped
And stutter-stepped
Like an old-time movie
You
And although
Obscured
Remembered
Only fragments
Monochrome
And eclipsed
In black and white
Your image
Lingers
You
A
Photograph
My passion felt
Your contour
Choreograph
Dancing in the strobe
Your outline
Forever
Next to me
You
I will not forget
You
In shadow
Black and white
You
In silhouette
Published 19th Dec 2011
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Anonymous
19th Dec 2011 4:34pm
yacolt,
Really enjoyed this one. Through your words I could see it all as you wrote it:
"Your snapshot
That used to be
Framed
Cropped
And stutter-stepped
Like an old-time movie
You"
Great write!
tornado
Really enjoyed this one. Through your words I could see it all as you wrote it:
"Your snapshot
That used to be
Framed
Cropped
And stutter-stepped
Like an old-time movie
You"
Great write!
tornado
Anonymous
19th Dec 2011 5:44pm
The short, choppy lines really work well as a literary device to draw out the thoughts. It seems like stream of consciousness, although your diction and rhythm are unbroken.
This piece is lovely and achingly painful at the same time.
This piece is lovely and achingly painful at the same time.
19th Dec 2011 6:19pm
23rd Dec 2011 11:42pm
Thanks you guys for commenting. Love poems like this don't get the reads that even bad erotic gets, so its nice to receive encouraging comments.
Anonymous
28th Dec 2011 1:01am
I loved it! it's like a lovely black and white dream :)
