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The Promise
there they were
still laid up at 7:16 am
he stayed up
all night comforting her
in her loss
in one of
the most trying moments
of her life
he decided to be
more than just a gentleman
he gave her
his gentle soul to rest
her head upon
he kept his clothes on
undressed his ego
just so he could address
the tender rawness of her emotions
from a place of
genuineness compassion
and empathy
never seeking
an advantage...or hedging for
future leverage
he gave her the space
in which she could bare her
vulnerabilities
he poised himself as
her silent bear
that would protect her wholeness
stilled in steadiness
as she wept until she slept
at last relieved
by a promise that was
finally kept
Published 25th Jul 2019
Author's Note
Inspired by pic...
It was too easy to objectify this..so
I took a second look and chose to channel something else instead...
It was too easy to objectify this..so
I took a second look and chose to channel something else instead...
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25th Jul 2019 10:25am
I must say the finalization is so mentally enriching within its silent depth, a beautiful analogy of inner peace and solitude achieving the most tenderest moment between the physical and spiritual psyche found under the beautiful and touching strokes of your pen
25th Jul 2019 10:56am
I LOVE HOW YOU CHANGED THE IMAGE INTO SOMETHING MORE THAN WHAT IT MEANT APPEAR TO OTHERS THIS SHOWS THAT NOT ALL MEN'S ARE DOGS FOR THERE ARE THOSE OF US WHO HAVE A HEART AS WELL AS A SPIRITUAL SOUL BEAUTIFULLY PENNED TO PAPER
25th Jul 2019 6:07pm
26th Jul 2019 1:43am
TLC is foundational and so important; it builds trust & respect ! Kudos on a deep write... 😎
26th Jul 2019 5:10pm
....and you nailed it by expressing the tenderness instead of the tainted. Excellent!
Anonymous
28th Jul 2019 9:11am
Truly unique my friend
29th Jul 2019 6:26am
This piece is so beautiful. The picture as you said could have sent you to a very erotic place. Yet you choose the unseen tenderness to showcase. And to be honest I had to look at the pic again! Then I saw it! He is clothed. He could be consoling her! The fact you saw that in this! BRAVO Naajir, this is tender and compassionate! Yes this is brilliant Poet!
23rd Nov 2021 4:35am
The poem is awesome and as it expresses the man not taking advantage of the girl in her vulnerable miserable plight, the pic doesn't go well with it at all. Kudos!!
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