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58 Minutes - The Changing Room
Fine...
if that's what you think then
Oh no,
it's nothing
Carry on
(long sigh
short sigh
Thanks a lot
(eye roll
foot tap)
You can wait in the car
if you like...
You're a man
so who needs
your opinion
anyway
I'm sorry I even asked
I should know by now
not to bother
I'll just change
I'll only be
another
five minutes...
Published 6th Jan 2010
| Edited 2nd Mar 2016
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Anonymous
6th Jan 2010 4:26pm
Nice piece. Original and slightly surreal. Finely wrought and considered.
6th Jan 2010 4:47pm
This was a first attempt at writing in 'woman-speak' and as with learning any new language there are always vocabulary related problems. Thanks for the comment, Jack.
6th Jan 2010 4:51pm
First, I laughed. Then I read it again and felt kind of sad. That's just about epitomizes living. I think that's why it had such an impact.
And the phrasing is excellent.
And the phrasing is excellent.
6th Jan 2010 5:47pm
Thanks Merda - this piece was very carefully considered and I'm pleased you approve. (Hope you're nice and warm in that shed, by the way!)
6th Jan 2010 6:54pm
