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Huh?
I see lips moving,
But no sound.
Thoughts going around and around
Filling my head.
I didn’t hear a word she said.
I’m so distracted.
A lot on my mind.
I can’t separate the voice in my head
From hers;
Not enough time.
Finally she pauses.
All eyes on me.
All eyes on who?
She silently waits.
As polite as can be
I say “Could you repeat that again?”
But no sound.
Thoughts going around and around
Filling my head.
I didn’t hear a word she said.
I’m so distracted.
A lot on my mind.
I can’t separate the voice in my head
From hers;
Not enough time.
Finally she pauses.
All eyes on me.
All eyes on who?
She silently waits.
As polite as can be
I say “Could you repeat that again?”
Published 22nd May 2019
| Edited 23rd May 2019
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Anonymous
22nd May 2019 3:25pm
You should be writing more often. This is a very well crafted poem.
I suggest adding on to the 2nd to last line.
"As polite as I can be"
It will rhyme with "me" and add more emphasis the the rhyme of "who?" and "you".
I suggest adding on to the 2nd to last line.
"As polite as I can be"
It will rhyme with "me" and add more emphasis the the rhyme of "who?" and "you".
22nd May 2019 4:20pm
Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment...Your suggestion makes total sense...love it
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26th May 2019 4:35am
It's a like from me. I wrote one called 'My Ears Don't Always Hear' which has a similar vibe to your poem, I think.
26th May 2019 6:11am
Thank you..I’m so glad you liked it...I’ll have to read the one you wrote if it’s on here
26th May 2019 2:10pm
