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And This Big World That Will Go On Without Us
Ritual madness feverish fire
It’s the blur of your body dancing
Nimble and drunk on wine
He has the chaos of the hunter
And the fight inside the prey
But it’s me who pulls him under
It’s my hand that feeds his flame
Ember slow and moon sliver light
But we claim this sheer second
Alone and stumbling through the night
Until the fall that keeps us down
Curled up at his side
Bones sing from under the ground
And I smile at this short life
It’s the blur of your body dancing
Nimble and drunk on wine
He has the chaos of the hunter
And the fight inside the prey
But it’s me who pulls him under
It’s my hand that feeds his flame
Ember slow and moon sliver light
But we claim this sheer second
Alone and stumbling through the night
Until the fall that keeps us down
Curled up at his side
Bones sing from under the ground
And I smile at this short life
Published 19th Apr 2019
Author's Note
I've been thinking a lot about archetypes and how these are played again and again throughout our human history by people with different struggles, passions, and goals. From cave woman to modern woman, this is my try tonight at a snapshot of a moment of lovers and libations and enjoying life :)
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20th Apr 2019 3:14am
I hope you elaborate more on this or write more like these. It feels like something that started in the middle and could go on and on (somewhat like the way archetypes themselves are used).
20th Apr 2019 3:58am
I would love to do more like this, and I can totally see why it feels like more of a middle than a final piece. I'm actually happy that you said that haha, because the night I wrote this I wanted to capture just a small moment that resonated with me- a scene with roles that felt ancient, timeless, and temporary all at once. Just a teeny moment in a life full of them. Thank you for reading this! I hope you're having a nice night :)
21st Apr 2019 2:14pm
That is very cool!
It feels final as in polished, but it's like I opened a book to a page and read that page, yet it still made sense within itself.
'a scene with roles that felt ancient, timeless, and temporary all at once. Just a teeny moment in a life full of them.' - this hits very close to home for me.
It feels final as in polished, but it's like I opened a book to a page and read that page, yet it still made sense within itself.
'a scene with roles that felt ancient, timeless, and temporary all at once. Just a teeny moment in a life full of them.' - this hits very close to home for me.
20th Apr 2019 4:22am
I really enjoyed reading this, I found it very interesting! Good write x
20th Apr 2019 4:28am
Thank you Emily! I'm so glad you liked it, I loved your poem The Cotton Dress. The pacing of it and the suspense there made me think of Megan Abbott, who may not be a poet but she's one of the most interesting writers I've read. You're seriously one of my favorite poets on here and I'm really humbled you thought this was interesting.
xx
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20th Apr 2019 4:31am
You're too nice :) I appreciate the comment and you adding my poem to your reading list! It made my night, truly. I look forward to seeing what else you come up with. Stay inspired x
7th Jun 2019 11:14pm
9th Jun 2019 3:22am
Thank you for all of your comments! It means a lot to me that what I've written so far resonates with you. I hope you're having a good night :)
