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Deity
His life seems a wide minefield
Ill winds blowing through his hair
But he feels his trepidation yield
When he hears her climb the stair
She has her ways to comfort him
Still her succor does come at a price
Yet even when his thoughts turn grim
He knows his payment will suffice
She earns every dollar spent
Transforming him into a god
A deity in quick descent
She parts her legs, now fully awed.
Ill winds blowing through his hair
But he feels his trepidation yield
When he hears her climb the stair
She has her ways to comfort him
Still her succor does come at a price
Yet even when his thoughts turn grim
He knows his payment will suffice
She earns every dollar spent
Transforming him into a god
A deity in quick descent
She parts her legs, now fully awed.
Published 27th Mar 2019
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27th Mar 2019 8:18pm
27th Mar 2019 9:01pm
I should have put "funny" among the themes, since that how it's intended. I'm glad I brought this a chuckle dear Brenda. Thank you for the kind comment and RL entry!
27th Mar 2019 10:24pm
"She parts her legs, now fully awed" - suggests she has been waiting for him sitting knickerless on the steps.
Maybe so. The transition from stairs to bed is quite a leap. Thanks for the observant comment, Solomon. Still, doing it on the stairs might present an interesting challenge. I will revise this. Thanks again.
28th Mar 2019 6:18am
The sound of your love on her way to the bedroom while you are already in has its own romantic vibe. A pleasant distraction is on the way...….
28th Mar 2019 5:49am
Damn it, crow...
"A deity in quick descent
She parts her legs, now fully awed." ...
You really jumped from calm to wild in all of, like 70 words. Woah dude, another goodie for the list!!
"A deity in quick descent
She parts her legs, now fully awed." ...
You really jumped from calm to wild in all of, like 70 words. Woah dude, another goodie for the list!!
29th Mar 2019 2:10am
I just hope the jump wasn't too abrupt. My poems tend to be short, since my attention span is lacking. Thank you for the kind comment and RL entry, Pandora. And this from a poet of your caliber. You honor me.
29th Mar 2019 8:14pm
Oh, no way! It was a well surprised jump by all means, crow. You're always most welcome too, you're one of the best here!!
28th Mar 2019 11:34am
29th Mar 2019 2:13am
That's human nature, seems to me. You are a special man and poet, much beloved.
28th Mar 2019 6:19pm
29th Mar 2019 2:14am
3rd Apr 2019 8:16pm
3rd Apr 2019 11:17pm
Sometimes I think I'm a bit too tight. I admire those who can write poetry and sustain more lines than my attention span is capable of. Thank you for the comment and RL add!
