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Throb
A pulse resounding through the walls
Wretched vocals, drums of blight
Some language from worlds unknown
But words suggesting pure spite
The locution slowly clarifies
Backed by heavy metal spiked with rap
Through the wall an incoherence
A potent blend now fit to scrap
He believes quiet to be precious
Though not comprised of gold
So anything to halt the throb
Before his jet black wings unfold.
Wretched vocals, drums of blight
Some language from worlds unknown
But words suggesting pure spite
The locution slowly clarifies
Backed by heavy metal spiked with rap
Through the wall an incoherence
A potent blend now fit to scrap
He believes quiet to be precious
Though not comprised of gold
So anything to halt the throb
Before his jet black wings unfold.
Author's Note
Suggested by the garbled tones and music heard through my northern wall.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Throb
11th Mar 2019 8:59pm
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11th Mar 2019 9:05pm
Re. Throb
11th Mar 2019 9:24pm
dearest Thomas at first
I thought you were experiencing
what I did these last couple weeks...
sounds dreadful
but this is a great haunting write...
love Brenda ❤
I thought you were experiencing
what I did these last couple weeks...
sounds dreadful
but this is a great haunting write...
love Brenda ❤
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If I could distinctly hear the music clearly it might be different. Rap and heavy metal can work well together in the right hands, say Faith No More or Rage Against the Machine for example.
In any case, I'm sorry to hear about your experience. Your latest poem, "a psychopath's diary," catches it brilliantly, although I don't perceive you as anything but a fine writer and woman. I admire you and your courage.
Thank you for the kind words and RL inclusion!
Love, Thomas
In any case, I'm sorry to hear about your experience. Your latest poem, "a psychopath's diary," catches it brilliantly, although I don't perceive you as anything but a fine writer and woman. I admire you and your courage.
Thank you for the kind words and RL inclusion!
Love, Thomas
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Anonymous
11th Mar 2019 10:10pm
Dear Thomas, I loved this because you expressed the sensation of hearing as if the person has his head under water. At first, looking at the picture and reading, I imagined the scenery of the film The Crow with Brandon Lee. Then reading your answers to those who commented before me, I understood what you effectively meant and it's mind blowing like a nightmare. Loved it. Well done.
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11th Mar 2019 10:34pm
"His head underwater." That's exactly my perception of hearing the music next door, a dull rumble or throb, punctuated by yelps from the tenant. Hard to take, really. Thank you so much for the kindness and RL listing!
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Anonymous
11th Mar 2019 10:50pm
Well deserved my friend.
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Re. Throb
11th Mar 2019 11:52pm
Great write Crow. I need to share my first thought when I read "Throb". It wasnt about music. LOL <3
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21st Mar 2019 10:37pm
First thoughts can be deceiving. The title of this alone probably suggests erotica. Glad you enjoyed this!
Re. Throb
12th Mar 2019 00:31am
This wasn't what I expected. Lol. That unwanted sound drives me up the wall too. I'm sensitive with music. I love it but if it's a percussion to something I can't stand, I want to jump out of my skin... music all together is on my terms.
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21st Mar 2019 10:39pm
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Anonymous
12th Mar 2019 6:40pm
i don't always listen to black metal, but when i do... so do my neighbors.
oy vey... there's always one who has volume control issues...
oy vey... there's always one who has volume control issues...
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21st Mar 2019 10:42pm
I didn't even know there was such a thing as black metal. I'm way behind on rock music these days. I'll have to give it a listen, unless I inadvertently already have. Thank you!
Re. Throb
21st Mar 2019 10:30pm
i know its been too, waaayy too long since reading you,
but ive gotten chills now...
but ive gotten chills now...
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21st Mar 2019 10:35pm
I'm delighted to see you back, Noire. I've been missing you, and your exceptional work.