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Different Worlds
When you see the sunset
What a beautiful sight to behold
But I see the same sunset
And I can already feel the deep cold
You see, we live very different lives
More different than you know
But I can tell you a tiny bit
About my little freak show
At night, you relax into the mattress
Feeling like you can finally breathe
But I feel the pressure and pain everywhere
Pushed against the bed beneath me
When you wake, you feel refreshed
Ready to take on the whole world
I wake, and stretch and crack and moan
And hope they still see a smiling girl
You take a shower, you dry your hair
You throw on the clothes you need
All the while I take my time
Listen to your body is what they heed
I walk real slow, with old painful hips
As you slow your pace to match mine
You don’t know what pain I’m hiding
While I do my best to shine
Somedays you think, oh it’s not that bad
I stopped whining about my every pain
I let you be naive and shrouded
For the smile I keep is feigned
We live in such different worlds
Somedays I know you don’t see it
You’ll forget these days soon
But for me this will always be it
These different worlds are veiled
You think you see it all
But you only see what I let you see
You could never possibly see it all
What a beautiful sight to behold
But I see the same sunset
And I can already feel the deep cold
You see, we live very different lives
More different than you know
But I can tell you a tiny bit
About my little freak show
At night, you relax into the mattress
Feeling like you can finally breathe
But I feel the pressure and pain everywhere
Pushed against the bed beneath me
When you wake, you feel refreshed
Ready to take on the whole world
I wake, and stretch and crack and moan
And hope they still see a smiling girl
You take a shower, you dry your hair
You throw on the clothes you need
All the while I take my time
Listen to your body is what they heed
I walk real slow, with old painful hips
As you slow your pace to match mine
You don’t know what pain I’m hiding
While I do my best to shine
Somedays you think, oh it’s not that bad
I stopped whining about my every pain
I let you be naive and shrouded
For the smile I keep is feigned
We live in such different worlds
Somedays I know you don’t see it
You’ll forget these days soon
But for me this will always be it
These different worlds are veiled
You think you see it all
But you only see what I let you see
You could never possibly see it all
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Re. Different Worlds
10th Mar 2019 3:42am
I like this one, the first four lines are very half empty, half full, then as it goes on the picture gets a little sharper. Try not to bottle it all up, but don't let it out on just one person either is what I've been learning :) Nice job on the poem, welcome to the site :)
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Re: Re. Different Worlds
10th Mar 2019 3:45am
thanks!
edit: question, haha... are you referring to the writing as not bottling it up or... the situation i'm writing about?
edit: question, haha... are you referring to the writing as not bottling it up or... the situation i'm writing about?
Re. Different Worlds
10th Mar 2019 3:51am
"You don’t know what pain I’m hiding While I do my best to shine Somedays you think, oh it’s not that bad I stopped whining about my every pain I let you be naive and shrouded" I guess I was looking somewhere around here and thinking that it's ok to show pain once in a while, might even get a shoulder to lean on here and there.
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Re: Re. Different Worlds
10th Mar 2019 3:54am
Mm, very good point. I suppose living in constant pain makes you want to... shield your loved ones. Even at the sake of yourself. When you hurt, they hurt. And wouldn't you do everything to make sure they didn't have to suffer with you? I suppose that's something I could have breached upon in the poem. I didn't realize it would be considered deeply. Then again... this is the first time I've let other people (poets) read what I have written :P
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10th Mar 2019 3:59am
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Anonymous
10th Mar 2019 5:13am
I usually hate when someone rhymes the same word, but in your second rhymes, they refer back to the first one. And thats cool. So now I can say................great poem.
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Re: Re. Different Worlds
10th Mar 2019 5:15am
Thank you! Yeah, there was a bit of an emphasis when doing so. So glad you caught that. Thanks for the kudos.
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Re. Different Worlds
8th Jun 2019 10:39pm
I can relate to this as being a diabetic there are those days although I always see the beauty of a sunset and the more beautiful sunrise : )
Liked the flow of this, well written : )
Liked the flow of this, well written : )
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Re. Different Worlds
29th Jun 2019 3:22am
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29th Jun 2019 3:25am
Mhmm, I do. I'm disabled :/ Genetic, progressive, metabolizing disorder. Fun stuff haha
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Sounds like it. No wonder you feel unhappy! I think sometimes other people block out your suffering cos it brings them down too I guess. It's like they can't deal with your bleak situation emotionally. It's not easy for you & all those who love you, I know.
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29th Jun 2019 3:32am
Yeah, wow, you know this poem seems like such a long time ago.. But you're right, I've gotten used to it being behind me, the strong feelings about it, kind of like getting used to it I guess. But people are that way, hell... I'm that way too.
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29th Jun 2019 3:35am
Lol. At least you're honest. I guess you've had those moments when you've felt like saying, 'Shut up & stop whinging!' to somebody who's got their eyeball hanging out. Haha! ;-)
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Re. Different Worlds
29th Feb 2024 3:55pm
Very impressive, very insightful. A lot of folks out there suffer from depression and other illnesses we are not aware of just by looking at them. it's important to be cognizant of their struggles.
Superb work.
Superb work.
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