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When
The sun surrenders its eternal war against gravity
The naked core exposed, dwindles into dark dust,
or
E x p l odes into a brilliant
All consuming flame
Civilization snuffed out like a wick
Or evolved to the point
That humans
Cease
On that accursed hour, I shall
Cede all hope for humanity
I guess I am a glutton for punishment
The naked core exposed, dwindles into dark dust,
or
E x p l odes into a brilliant
All consuming flame
Civilization snuffed out like a wick
Or evolved to the point
That humans
Cease
On that accursed hour, I shall
Cede all hope for humanity
I guess I am a glutton for punishment
Published 16th Feb 2019
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16th Feb 2019 11:07pm
great use of explode, isolating odes by itself. hope as long as 7.6 billion years is indeed..... you a prometheus on this rock of ours. This poem sounds so awful so terrible until that last hold out. beautifully done.
18th Feb 2019 7:18am
Your descriptions create such vivid images in the mind's eye, really well done. This cosmic end, which lead to what I found a surprising and inspiring twist at the end. We have to hold to hope. Though our lives are fraught with suffering, there is ever present beauty to being.
Daniel
Daniel
