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Memories
Memories
Fill the corners of my mind
Light the darkness in my soul
Warm the coldness in my heart
Memories
Happy and sad, bittersweet
A chromatic palette
That paints the canvas of my life
In vibrant hues of life's beauty
And love's sweet pain ecstacy
Memories
Of your warm hello
Of the laughters and smiles we share
Of your silent exit from my life without a farewell or adieu
Fill the corners of my mind
Light the darkness in my soul
Warm the coldness in my heart
Memories
Happy and sad, bittersweet
A chromatic palette
That paints the canvas of my life
In vibrant hues of life's beauty
And love's sweet pain ecstacy
Memories
Of your warm hello
Of the laughters and smiles we share
Of your silent exit from my life without a farewell or adieu
Published 5th Feb 2019
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5th Feb 2019 12:03pm
Open-ended exits are the toughest to accept because there is no closure. You don't know what happened. This leaves a playground of scenarios in the mind which evolve over time. This poem expressed that feeling well.
I know you have requested friendly feedback only; however, is there a reason S1 is not capped, while the others are? I feel you need to be a bit more consistent in that regard. All cap, or cap only the beginning of each sentence for a smoother read throughout.
I know you have requested friendly feedback only; however, is there a reason S1 is not capped, while the others are? I feel you need to be a bit more consistent in that regard. All cap, or cap only the beginning of each sentence for a smoother read throughout.
Thanks Ahavati for your insightful comment. There is no special reason for S1 I was not aware of it. You are right I must pay attention to details for consistency. Thanks a lot.:-)
I have modified it already.
I have modified it already.
5th Feb 2019 1:02pm
Thanks Ahavati for your insightful comment. There is no special reason for S1 I was not aware of it. You are right I must pay attention to details for consistency. Thanks a lot.:-)
