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Judgement
My silence isn’t empty
My mouth hates to repeat
Screams shouting inside me
I’m emotionally beat
You're pathetic
The echoes in my temple
When no one can be found
I write them down in pencil
Disrupting their playground
You're pathetic
Glaring at the floor
Forget where I was going
My mind's a state of war
The reason is unknowing
You're pathetic
Food tastes all the same
Nothing stops this trembling
Reflection shakes my shame
It's clear I’m backwards peddling
You're pathetic
All my fears they surface
Whilst water level heightens
Wishing to cut this circuit
of being a broken. useless. item.
..pathetic
My mouth hates to repeat
Screams shouting inside me
I’m emotionally beat
You're pathetic
The echoes in my temple
When no one can be found
I write them down in pencil
Disrupting their playground
You're pathetic
Glaring at the floor
Forget where I was going
My mind's a state of war
The reason is unknowing
You're pathetic
Food tastes all the same
Nothing stops this trembling
Reflection shakes my shame
It's clear I’m backwards peddling
You're pathetic
All my fears they surface
Whilst water level heightens
Wishing to cut this circuit
of being a broken. useless. item.
..pathetic
Published 24th Jan 2019
| Edited 17th May 2019
Author's Note
Regarding the drawing.. Just my simple doodling, as I put these words together
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24th Jan 2019 7:44pm
Wow! If the quality of your ink was a bad day I'd love to see some good writing Alice. Great write, love the flow and clever rhyming.
25th Jan 2019 7:40am
Well, for someone who is pathetic, you sure put out some fantastic poetry! I loved the expressiveness here, and is a window into your heart and the self esteem struggles that you battle.
I agree with everything in the first comment - it's a little dark and depressing, but the flow and the emotions keep it alive :)
Thanks for sharing, Tuncs!
p.s. forgot to mention that I love your little doodles. You have a very weird and interesting style. Lucky for you, I like weird and interesting things!
I agree with everything in the first comment - it's a little dark and depressing, but the flow and the emotions keep it alive :)
Thanks for sharing, Tuncs!
p.s. forgot to mention that I love your little doodles. You have a very weird and interesting style. Lucky for you, I like weird and interesting things!
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