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In Envy Of Nature
Me, my dozen small birds,
remembered Earth’s rose skirts
all around a lichens stone bed,
Before arranging seeds between
tree branches, but by dark,
doom took their darkness.
Heard the insects’ kingdoms,
of something among nothing
as stars slept;
So tenderly, white moths
do better in
luminous morning times,
Who light fire pockets floated,
breathing full on river water.
She thought if they fell, and
vanished back into night.
At least I never had thoughts,
grappling with Her perfect work.
Written by
Heaven_sent_Kathy
Published 13th Jan 2019
| Edited 7th Feb 2019
Author's Note
A special write for the challenge “Poetic Medic #2: To The Poem's Rescue”. The hosts have participants compose a new piece from 80 words from an existing poem.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. In Envy Of Nature
13th Jan 2019 11:50pm
Wonderful, Kathy! Absolutely beautiful in composition.
Thank you for braving this difficult challenge!
Best of luck in the comp.
Thank you for braving this difficult challenge!
Best of luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
13th Jan 2019 11:53pm
Thank you, Ahavati. You're always a dear, with your thoughtfulness & gentle nudge. I'm glad I tried this, it was/is a wonderful experience.
Kathy
Kathy
Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
13th Jan 2019 11:55pm
It truly is so rewarding! I am heartsick over the members who've told me they just can't do it! I'm like - yes you can! Don't give up!
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Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
13th Jan 2019 11:58pm
Omg yes it's true it's true. If I can do it, you know?
i'll be here onsite for a bit more. If you want, pm me a few of the names and I'll pm them back some encouragement, if you'd like. If they wouldn't mind. I'm feeling generous!
i'll be here onsite for a bit more. If you want, pm me a few of the names and I'll pm them back some encouragement, if you'd like. If they wouldn't mind. I'm feeling generous!
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14th Jan 2019 00:06am
Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
14th Jan 2019 00:10am
I'll wait nearby, checking for the red light when the pm comes on. Thanks for your confidence - I promise to be on my best behavior.
Re. In Envy Of Nature
Anonymous
14th Jan 2019 00:22am
Glad to see another stellar entry to our comps, Kathy.
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Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
14th Jan 2019 00:27am
Thank you Johnny, that's generous of you. It's I who am honored to be in any competitions hosted by you and Ahavati.
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2019 00:46am
The honor is ours to see great poetry emerge, Kathy. That's our reward for running such comps.
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2019 1:21am
Kathy,
You are a fantastic writer no matter what words you are instructed to use, honestly. Very beautiful.
Matthew.
PS. I bet if I told you to use the Pythagorean theorem to create a poem, you'd make it beautiful.
Good luck!
You are a fantastic writer no matter what words you are instructed to use, honestly. Very beautiful.
Matthew.
PS. I bet if I told you to use the Pythagorean theorem to create a poem, you'd make it beautiful.
Good luck!
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Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
15th Jan 2019 8:10am
Thank you, Matthew.
Hmm. I could do it, I don't know if it would be beautiful. After all, Pythagoras was a Greek with a formidable beard, and the hypotenuse is that thing that stays in the water all day long. ;-b
Hmm. I could do it, I don't know if it would be beautiful. After all, Pythagoras was a Greek with a formidable beard, and the hypotenuse is that thing that stays in the water all day long. ;-b
Re. In Envy Of Nature
15th Jan 2019 7:30am
Wow! What an incredibly beautiful work of art! The natural imagery is absolute magical :)
Awesome! Thanks so much for sharing!
Awesome! Thanks so much for sharing!
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Re: Re. In Envy Of Nature
My gratitude and thanks, NewBeginnings. It's an honor for my humble self to show what's in my heart and mind. It's a nice feeling when a reader connects. I don't shiver as much.