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Terminal One
I gave her everything,
My love, my dreams, my soul
She asked me to meet her
Lagrange Five Station
Eight o'Clock standard time
And it was there,
Minutes late and heartbroken
I gifted her one last time.
I gave her Space.
My love, my dreams, my soul
She asked me to meet her
Lagrange Five Station
Eight o'Clock standard time
And it was there,
Minutes late and heartbroken
I gifted her one last time.
I gave her Space.
Published 7th Jan 2019
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Your love is mature beyond years!
very relatable ink, for me
I am almost over the sad I felt when I gave my Love the space to grow without me
well done, this emotional spill
& gl
in the comp A Picture Holds A Thousand Words #5
very relatable ink, for me
I am almost over the sad I felt when I gave my Love the space to grow without me
well done, this emotional spill
& gl
in the comp A Picture Holds A Thousand Words #5
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- Edited 7th May 2019 00:46am
7th Jan 2019 10:09pm
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7th Jan 2019 10:27pm
7th Jan 2019 10:29pm
You chose a compelling image. It really stirs the creative juices. Thanks for hosting.
7th Jan 2019 10:31pm
I'm glad the picture sparked your interest. This is the fifth month I've hosted this competition, and I plan on doing so indefinitely. If you're interested in seeing more compelling pictures, I encourage you to participate in my future competitions.
9th Jan 2019 00:22am
This is the nuclear bomb of entries. It exploded. The gift you gave her in the end was the greatest one. Among all the others before it. Bravo and bravo.
9th Jan 2019 10:49pm
It's strange, but this poem formed virtually instantly upon seeing the image.
I imagined the man giving her all of the cosmos to find herself, and the bittersweet significance of love released.
I am glad you enjoyed it. It was one of those less-is-more narratives and it seemed to click.
Thanks
I imagined the man giving her all of the cosmos to find herself, and the bittersweet significance of love released.
I am glad you enjoyed it. It was one of those less-is-more narratives and it seemed to click.
Thanks
10th Jan 2019 00:59am
3rd Feb 2019 4:40am
This piece is just beautiful. life’s universal story contained perfectly within crisp, succinct ink. R.
