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Goodbye Soul
Can a bed contain two bodies,
but not a single soul?
Skin encases the hollowed chests
where once two hearts were whole.
The lightest touch and swiftest brush
prodded, pricked, and poked-
punctured that which beat within.
But now it's forever dulled.
Souls seeped out the opened slits.
Then left behind was nothingness.
Once the heart was deemed unfit,
the soul slips past the groping fists.
How can I possibly stay
when I, here, emotionless lay.
but not a single soul?
Skin encases the hollowed chests
where once two hearts were whole.
The lightest touch and swiftest brush
prodded, pricked, and poked-
punctured that which beat within.
But now it's forever dulled.
Souls seeped out the opened slits.
Then left behind was nothingness.
Once the heart was deemed unfit,
the soul slips past the groping fists.
How can I possibly stay
when I, here, emotionless lay.
Published 3rd Jan 2019
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3rd Jan 2019 6:27am
"Can a bed contain two bodies,
but not a single soul? "
That's very powerful. Nice piece.
but not a single soul? "
That's very powerful. Nice piece.
3rd Jan 2019 12:21pm
3rd Jan 2019 7:04am
3rd Jan 2019 12:22pm
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3rd Jan 2019 8:33am
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3rd Jan 2019 9:02am
I join the other two comments a fine poem a fine beginning I look forward to more A Happy New Year Kexby
3rd Jan 2019 12:24pm
It was dreadful, but at least I got a poem out of the experience. 🤷🏽♀️
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. 😊
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. 😊
3rd Jan 2019 12:25pm
3rd Jan 2019 12:25pm
3rd Jan 2019 12:37pm
3rd Jan 2019 12:31pm
Oh ... the loneliness of this ... elegant simplicity ... like a whispered truth ... bravo my poetess ... welcome to DUP ...
3rd Jan 2019 12:43pm
This is great but I would lose just two words to make it even greater. The 1st one is "it's" in the last line of the 2nd verse
& the other is "was" in the 2nd & 3rd lines of the 3rd verse.
What d'ya reckon; do I have a point? ;-)
& the other is "was" in the 2nd & 3rd lines of the 3rd verse.
What d'ya reckon; do I have a point? ;-)
3rd Jan 2019 1:44pm
3rd Jan 2019 3:58pm
Excellent piece!👏
Really loved the opening lines
"Can a bed contain two bodies,
but not a single soul?"
Thats deep i dig this write👏👏
Really loved the opening lines
"Can a bed contain two bodies,
but not a single soul?"
Thats deep i dig this write👏👏
3rd Jan 2019 4:06pm
3rd Jan 2019 4:09pm
your sing-song voice is fathomless
you grip at one's chest until nothing is left
bled to oblivion is all emotion
enters the soul stark revelations
to toil at love for little reward is pointless
your love is pure
your own love light the way
to beautiful days in the sun
before another body took it away
from the gray walks a seer with much wisdom
rose from the ashes of broken dreams and visions
be not sullen in this truth
let it be your guide to brighter tomorrows
I deeply felt your poem
your soul shines through the darkness...
love Brenda ❤
you grip at one's chest until nothing is left
bled to oblivion is all emotion
enters the soul stark revelations
to toil at love for little reward is pointless
your love is pure
your own love light the way
to beautiful days in the sun
before another body took it away
from the gray walks a seer with much wisdom
rose from the ashes of broken dreams and visions
be not sullen in this truth
let it be your guide to brighter tomorrows
I deeply felt your poem
your soul shines through the darkness...
love Brenda ❤
5th Jan 2019 4:43am
