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LOST world
this is the story of an unknown girl
keeping her lost in an forgotten world
skys always gray and sun never shins
sometimes iv forgotten what is mine
Shinu sumori desu
Shinu sumori desu
tasukete!
tasukete!
this is a story that can never be told
hearing her scream and watch it unfold
never was lost time cant tell
of this forgotten world lost in hell...
-Kumiko Yamamoto
keeping her lost in an forgotten world
skys always gray and sun never shins
sometimes iv forgotten what is mine
Shinu sumori desu
Shinu sumori desu
tasukete!
tasukete!
this is a story that can never be told
hearing her scream and watch it unfold
never was lost time cant tell
of this forgotten world lost in hell...
-Kumiko Yamamoto
Published 13th Nov 2011
| Edited 4th Jan 2012
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13th Nov 2011 3:34pm
really good!! sounds like a song. beutiful. A little tip though is that you spelled shines wrong..shins...and you spelled I've wrong..iv...
also what language is that? i think its japanese but i might be wrong:) great job tho!!
also what language is that? i think its japanese but i might be wrong:) great job tho!!
27th Nov 2011 10:30pm
yes it is japanese..im sorry about the spelling englsh isnt my frst languege
8th Dec 2011 8:38pm
There is so much that remains untold here! The questions run rampant in my head...
10th Dec 2011 5:12am
13th Dec 2011 2:18am
This poem is very mysterious because I didn't understand much but the english! :) Lol the flow is really nice though. I enjoyed it!
13th Dec 2011 3:52am
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