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Love Me till Im Dead
love me till im broken
love me till im dead
Love me till im torn to pieces
love me black and blue and red
Love me shattered ribs and broken bones
love me painful cried out moans
love me yellowing shades of brown and
love me bleeding cuts of red
so love me till i broken baby
love me till im dead
love me till im dead
Love me till im torn to pieces
love me black and blue and red
Love me shattered ribs and broken bones
love me painful cried out moans
love me yellowing shades of brown and
love me bleeding cuts of red
so love me till i broken baby
love me till im dead
Published 12th Nov 2011
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12th Nov 2011 1:50am
That poem was pretty good. You spelled "pieces" wrong (here it's correct) and you capitalized Shattered, where I don't think you meant to there.
It's lyrical - it could be set to music.
jetset
It's lyrical - it could be set to music.
jetset
12th Nov 2011 2:11am
12th Nov 2011 4:33am
Wow, I love this. A humble tone to a violent story. Nice length and a good rhythm, well done :)
13th Nov 2011 1:25am
