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here to stay
I'm glad you're up look at the brightness of the light,
you may have started but ill end this fight,
I would have giving you my heart if you asked,
but once again i see that "love"is a feeling that doesn't last,
I guess you didn't appreciate what i was doing for you,
Since you went to look for another guy that would feed you,
look as i cut him up piece by piece,
ill cook him for your dinner. now would you also like some peas?,
to go with his tongue, i mean you're really found of it i saw it in your mouth not to long ago,
shut up, wait what you really think ima let you go?
after all you have done you think ill let you walk away?
well no, girl you're here to stay,
you may have started but ill end this fight,
I would have giving you my heart if you asked,
but once again i see that "love"is a feeling that doesn't last,
I guess you didn't appreciate what i was doing for you,
Since you went to look for another guy that would feed you,
look as i cut him up piece by piece,
ill cook him for your dinner. now would you also like some peas?,
to go with his tongue, i mean you're really found of it i saw it in your mouth not to long ago,
shut up, wait what you really think ima let you go?
after all you have done you think ill let you walk away?
well no, girl you're here to stay,
Published 11th Nov 2011
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11th Nov 2011 11:44pm
I think you may have meant to write "given" in line three.
Vindictively captivating piece.
"now would you also like some peas?,
to go with his tongue, i mean you're really *fond* of it i saw it in your mouth not to long ago" I love that part.
As far as writings like this go it's not my least favorite, by-far. I think you have potential.
Vindictively captivating piece.
"now would you also like some peas?,
to go with his tongue, i mean you're really *fond* of it i saw it in your mouth not to long ago" I love that part.
As far as writings like this go it's not my least favorite, by-far. I think you have potential.
13th Nov 2011 11:14pm
yeah, i should have re-read it for mistakes but as you see i didn't, wow, thanks a lot for your honest opinion.
8th Apr 2012 11:37am
There's an "edit" button on the upper-right of the poem, if you wanna fix it. ;)
