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bubble
your love was bubble
i was in trouble by your bubble
it floats around
so thin
so light
that once being touched
it can be broken easily
maybe im a bit silly
taking care of your bubble love
small mistake
i can lose you
easily
like im beinng silly
about your love
i was in trouble by your bubble
it floats around
so thin
so light
that once being touched
it can be broken easily
maybe im a bit silly
taking care of your bubble love
small mistake
i can lose you
easily
like im beinng silly
about your love
Published 21st Nov 2018
| Edited 27th Jan 2019
Author's Note
it may confuse you but
you will understand what i mean if you have already
experienced it .
you will understand what i mean if you have already
experienced it .
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21st Nov 2018 5:23pm
Aside from a few spelling mistakes, the message of your poem is clear. Love is a fickle thing, and indeed is as vulnerable as a bubble. It can easily be "popped" and the magic seizes to exist.
Thanks for participating in my competition!
Thanks for participating in my competition!
22nd Nov 2018 3:07am
