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Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
I'm riding a satin dragon
above a poppy field
glistening with Crimson crystals,
falling into your
charcoal ventricle
exonerating my breath,
I spend daydream crucifixions
riding the rippled crest
of abaca leaves
eidolon rings waltz synchronized
cauterizing a philippic symphony.
A bleeding Diamond turns your tear
exhuming the sapphire kingdom
under the crystal furnace
secure discrepancies cuddle,
mandated reveries are buried
in the glinted gleam of
demented offspring
mass murdering your false hope.
Ra is angry I outshone his glory
manifested goddess hiding in a woman
he rains down catastrophe in the guise of a man
to destroy my thoughts of ascension
far from him in another realm of knowing
in rebellion, I chant an ancient prayer
whispering I will take you with me
to the place of the first understanding
warrior of the ninth house
there you and I will consummate our love
and bring down the dragon
who he himself has risen over the people's
beguiling their minds and raping their thoughts
brainwashed infantile minions are the masses
that parade their ignorance
and defile our kingdom
our amor forbade
we are from opposing dynasties
celestial war tore us asunder
we have reunited in power
they will sing of our victory
it will be a story of great lore
how with a wink and a magic act
we at once disappeared
and Ra was left holding nothing but sand
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Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 3:26pm
Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 3:29pm
thank you graciously dearest Quietus One for the honor and pleasure of writing with you...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
Anonymous
15th Nov 2018 3:43pm
F'ing hell, this made my head bleed. Superb you pair.

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Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 3:57pm
thank you most graciously from us both dearest Rob for such a fantastic comment bringing me smiles...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 4:20pm
Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 4:35pm
thank you graciously dearest Incognegro for such a great comment...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
Go head girl.
falling into your
charcoal ventricle
exonerating my breath,
who he himself has risen over the people's
beguiling their minds and raping their thoughts
brainwashed infantile minions are the masses
that parade their ignorance
and defile our kingdom
it will be a story of great lore
how with a wink and a magic act
we at once disappeared
and Ra was left holding nothing but sand
Not a very accessible write at first glance it takes a certain kinda mind to penetrate this.
falling into your
charcoal ventricle
exonerating my breath,
who he himself has risen over the people's
beguiling their minds and raping their thoughts
brainwashed infantile minions are the masses
that parade their ignorance
and defile our kingdom
it will be a story of great lore
how with a wink and a magic act
we at once disappeared
and Ra was left holding nothing but sand
Not a very accessible write at first glance it takes a certain kinda mind to penetrate this.
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Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 4:34pm
thank you graciously beautiful Nari from us both I'm deeply honored by the RL add...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 4:43pm
Exquisitely crafted piece! The gods and goddesses are jealous! Looking forward to more colabs from y’all!
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thank you graciously dearest Lyrical One from us both for such a beautiful comment...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 5:12pm
Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 8:36pm
thank you graciously from both of us dearest Dark Sun you bring me smiles...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
Anonymous
15th Nov 2018 5:35pm
Holy carp, Crimmy!!
You should write a fantasy novel!!
Another direction! You amaze me, Kiddo!!
Awesome, beautiful words, and writing!
Love,
Matthew.
You should write a fantasy novel!!
Another direction! You amaze me, Kiddo!!
Awesome, beautiful words, and writing!
Love,
Matthew.

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Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 8:37pm
giggles thank you from Quietus and me dearest Matthew... I love your visits...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 6:01pm
Wow this is so good it just sounds so epic👏
" Ra is angry I outshone his glory
manifested goddess hiding in a woman
he rains down catastrophe in the guise of a man
to destroy my thoughts of ascension
far from him in another realm of knowing" amazing piece brenda👏✌
" Ra is angry I outshone his glory
manifested goddess hiding in a woman
he rains down catastrophe in the guise of a man
to destroy my thoughts of ascension
far from him in another realm of knowing" amazing piece brenda👏✌
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Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 8:38pm
thank you most graciously dearest Hunter from both of us... you are deeply appreciated...
love Brenda ✨
love Brenda ✨
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
Anonymous
15th Nov 2018 8:32pm
Round if applause in order as you two kinected on another level to breath life into this one....fine write indeed.

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Re: Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
15th Nov 2018 8:39pm
thank you graciously dearest Sinister One from both of us... I miss hearing from you poetically I'm so happy to see you...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
16th Nov 2018 00:14am
A great collaboration, pure magic from you and QQ. I'm in awe of you both. I try to pick some favorite lines to quote here but am at a loss. I love every word.
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Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
16th Nov 2018 3:53am
What a rand poem..!
Love... Passionate rule... even the gods would know!
Yes...!
Love
H
Love... Passionate rule... even the gods would know!
Yes...!
Love
H
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Re. Relinquished~with the awe inspiring QuietusQuill
12th Feb 2019 6:49pm