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The Health Store
The door's ajar
with healthy labels
all competing to be read
stern warnings
bark out grandma's fables
If I won't heed them
I'll be dead
Behind the counter
sits a banker
money coursing
through her veins
I pay my pills
and pause to thank her
She nods and says:
"Please call again."
Bottles rattle
in my pocket
those special offers
what a plus
It's such a shame
I got knocked over
jogging breathless
for the bus
with healthy labels
all competing to be read
stern warnings
bark out grandma's fables
If I won't heed them
I'll be dead
Behind the counter
sits a banker
money coursing
through her veins
I pay my pills
and pause to thank her
She nods and says:
"Please call again."
Bottles rattle
in my pocket
those special offers
what a plus
It's such a shame
I got knocked over
jogging breathless
for the bus
Published 3rd Nov 2011
| Edited 9th Feb 2023
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Anonymous
4th Nov 2011 6:40pm
The last verse is hilarious. My mum and Nan are always buying crap from those health food stores. My mum takes seaweed pills to increase her metabolism, or some shit.
There's some really neat language play here. For instance: "I pay my pills", falling as it does after you've established the banker metaphor. The line doesn't make any literal sense but is such a good pun it's hard to care. Bills and pills, both expensive annoyances. Thanks for the read, Abra.
There's some really neat language play here. For instance: "I pay my pills", falling as it does after you've established the banker metaphor. The line doesn't make any literal sense but is such a good pun it's hard to care. Bills and pills, both expensive annoyances. Thanks for the read, Abra.
5th Nov 2011 3:43am
....I'm afraid, but if it massages people into a state which they imagine is healthy then good luck.
The problem comes when "health" turns into an obsession for some individuals who are easily exploited by unscrupulous business elements.
Thanks for your comment, Jack.
The problem comes when "health" turns into an obsession for some individuals who are easily exploited by unscrupulous business elements.
Thanks for your comment, Jack.
