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The deepness of your thoughts that follow me,
So is the need for you to fill my crave.
To constant milk from passion’s agony,
That sprang from every spasm that you gave.
I breathe the depths and take you in each lung,
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me.
The only thought where all my hopes are hung;
On every inch your cock & tongue will be.
To open every part to look and see,
To swallow all the knowledge that awaits.
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me,
Renew each time you double penetrate.
The journey that enlightens you to bliss,
We’ve only scratched the surface with the key.
Discovering a new way with each kiss,
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me.
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me,
So is the need for you to fill my crave.
To constant milk from passion’s agony,
That sprang from every spasm that you gave.
I breathe the depths and take you in each lung,
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me.
The only thought where all my hopes are hung;
On every inch your cock & tongue will be.
To open every part to look and see,
To swallow all the knowledge that awaits.
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me,
Renew each time you double penetrate.
The journey that enlightens you to bliss,
We’ve only scratched the surface with the key.
Discovering a new way with each kiss,
The deepness of your thoughts that follow me.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 3rd Oct 2018
| Edited 11th Nov 2018
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- Edited 30th May 2019 3:51pm
3rd Oct 2018 11:36pm
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Re: Re. Deep
3rd Oct 2018 11:59pm
I thank you so much, dear Jarlath, and I’m terribly honored. I also forgot to add the extreme content warning even though I’ve written more extreme than this, so I’m back to do the deed.
Again, thank you. I look forward to seeing your progress. You can pm me should you want my thoughts.
~Jade
Again, thank you. I look forward to seeing your progress. You can pm me should you want my thoughts.
~Jade
Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 1:23am
Re: Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 2:04am
Thank you so much, A., for such generosity, and sharing that about yourself with me.
Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 1:54am
The repeating line was so masterfully interwoven into each stanza, that I forgot I was reading a quatern. You have reason to be proud of this poem, bravo!
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Re: Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 2:09am
Ohh thank you, Reggie, what a dear to share the impact, as a reader/poet, of this in the poem. I’m humbled & honored.
Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 2:17am
love the rhyming, the sexuality. the play on words...a sense-sational read...
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Re: Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 2:21am
Thank you, Lawrence, how good of you for sharing that, and such support. I’m so pleased for your enjoyment.
Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 2:48am
the quartet sound to this one
you've really painted pictures there
awesome
you've really painted pictures there
awesome
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Re: Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 3:27am
Thank you so much, Poet, very much appreciated. Besides seeing the visions, I hope you can also feel them.
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2018 9:13am
Visual Imagery is breathtaking in this one and the flow, perfect.
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Re: Re. Deep
Gracious thanks, Ragnar, for your words of honor for my sensual inspiration.
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4th Oct 2018 10:48am
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4th Oct 2018 11:07am
Hmmm, was. But lately have made a number of amazing connections. And thank you, Sun, it’s good of you to drop in to enjoy one of the results.
*smiles demurely*
*smiles demurely*
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4th Oct 2018 11:11am
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4th Oct 2018 11:18am
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2018 11:37am
you never fail to amaze. your lover is lucky man. Rob
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4th Oct 2018 12:29pm
Anonymous
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4th Oct 2018 3:11pm
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Re: Re. Deep
5th Oct 2018 9:13am
Re. Deep
How deep these words have settled in to me,
How deep my thoughts are taken there with you
How deep my wonder strays where wonders see
How deeply I adore your thoughts' pursue.
I deeply love this quatern... it has given rise to many ideas...
Well worth my reading list...
How deep my thoughts are taken there with you
How deep my wonder strays where wonders see
How deeply I adore your thoughts' pursue.
I deeply love this quatern... it has given rise to many ideas...
Well worth my reading list...
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Anonymous
4th Oct 2018 6:34pm
I like this alot
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Re: Re. Deep
4th Oct 2018 6:58pm
Why thank you, Christian, for coming by to read & take in what my words have to offer.
And welcome to the Deep.
And welcome to the Deep.
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Anonymous
5th Oct 2018 2:21pm
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Re: Re. Deep
5th Oct 2018 3:38pm
Thank you so very much, Arianell, for your appreciation, how pleased it makes one.
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Anonymous
6th Oct 2018 12:43pm
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Re. Deep
5th Oct 2018 7:21pm
Erotic and beautifully worded. You have obviously spent much effort on this, partly because of the quatern form. This has perfect rhyme and rhythm. And I love the repeated line: "The deepness of your thoughts that follow me." Excellent work!
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Re: Re. Deep
10th Oct 2018 00:48am
Thank you, my friend, for such a committed embrace of this piece... and for the RL honor.
Re. Deep
11th Nov 2018 1:25am
A deeply felt erotic poem. Just reading about the deepness of thought gives the sexual scene an even more emotional resonance.
XoXo
John
XoXo
John
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Re: Re. Deep
And especially in this case, because of that one line that repeats progressively through the piece. A big reason I love spinning ink into quaterns so often. My thanks for your appreciation, dear John.
Re. Deep
20th Nov 2018 12:01pm
Yes Miss Jade you are a erotic gift love the deepness in your words you should have a book ready to come out.
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Re: Re. Deep
20th Nov 2018 12:18pm
I appreciate your kind words, sherry. You have me at a disadvantage... for I’m a poet who doesn’t know what else to say at the moment. But thank you.