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Sick and Cyclical
Time
leaks out my ears
dissolving
the memories in between
weeks,
days,
months,
years
fracturing and melting
into a referenceless kaleidoscope
of razerblade moments
leaks out my ears
dissolving
the memories in between
weeks,
days,
months,
years
fracturing and melting
into a referenceless kaleidoscope
of razerblade moments
Published 2nd Oct 2018
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2nd Oct 2018 3:50am
I'm gonna be honest- I love everything but the last line. I am not against self harm or cutting poems, but it feels like an abrupt change of direction that is unnecessary and maybe a little forced.
2nd Oct 2018 3:59am
The entire point of the poem is that I can barely remember most my life except for the traumatic bits, the 'razorblade moments'.
2nd Oct 2018 4:05am
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3rd Oct 2018 11:53pm
