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Hot Plate
( a spill and scrub )
While early morning had you
greet me from the base of a
volcano, the air thick with
last night’s constant rainfall, in
the land of a string of pearls
disgorged by the sea and worn
down by recycled tempests;
the age-old trade-off of a
paradise, pursued and found
where even the birds are lost,
unseen and huddled, as they
catch up on their sleep, reclaimed.
And the first light of day, those
thousands of miles away, is
hard pressed to rear its flame from
such a drenching, a deluge —
a tirade of paper fans,
of mai tai in coconuts.
I eschew the pilot light
of a composition, on
the move, placing it on a
hot plate by my elbow bent,
just as your crackl’d voice crawls
into my canals, lent, to
leave its larvae for later,
to uncurl and feast upon
my brain - so ravenously.
While early morning had you
greet me from the base of a
volcano, the air thick with
last night’s constant rainfall, in
the land of a string of pearls
disgorged by the sea and worn
down by recycled tempests;
the age-old trade-off of a
paradise, pursued and found
where even the birds are lost,
unseen and huddled, as they
catch up on their sleep, reclaimed.
And the first light of day, those
thousands of miles away, is
hard pressed to rear its flame from
such a drenching, a deluge —
a tirade of paper fans,
of mai tai in coconuts.
I eschew the pilot light
of a composition, on
the move, placing it on a
hot plate by my elbow bent,
just as your crackl’d voice crawls
into my canals, lent, to
leave its larvae for later,
to uncurl and feast upon
my brain - so ravenously.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 27th Sep 2018
Author's Note
This style of poetry is a spill & scrub. Wherein the words come spilling out faster than you can write, giving you no time to edit. The scrub is to edit the spill with line breaks, punctuation, and typo fixes.
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Re. Hot Plate
27th Sep 2018 7:43pm
Re: Re. Hot Plate
Oh Lil’D, it’s such a pleasure, sweetheart... and thank you for coming in for a read.
~Jade🌋
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
Anonymous
27th Sep 2018 8:16pm
This is remarkable. Spill & scrub? I'm liking.
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
Yes, spill & scrub: an addition to a poet’s arsenal to get to know well and use when the muse is overwhelming you with more than you can handle. Take it on, even as the spillage tumbles in a riot. With this particle poem, it was a riot of fun for me!
And thank you for stopping by, my friend.
~ Jade🌋
And thank you for stopping by, my friend.
~ Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
27th Sep 2018 8:41pm
Never come across spill & scrub before...gives a nice flow to your writing...
Why did this poem make me think of Hawaii?
Dark Sun.
Why did this poem make me think of Hawaii?
Dark Sun.
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
Because that’s where he is currently on a much-needed vacation (and calls me early each morning). During his trips away from home, my writing tends to reflect this, which helps when I’m missing him.
There are spill & scrub works sprinkled throughout my catalogue.
Thank you for your comment, Sun. I’m glad you like the ink.
~Jade🌋
There are spill & scrub works sprinkled throughout my catalogue.
Thank you for your comment, Sun. I’m glad you like the ink.
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
27th Sep 2018 11:32pm
Very successful in its flow and visuals, took me second to get the hang of following it but that was really the point all along. Lush, as always
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Thank you, A., my friend. And right... theres no foul in taking a moment or a minute, to hear and feel the flow when it comes to a good ol’ spill & scrub.
I’m pleased you like it.
~Jade🌋
I’m pleased you like it.
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
27th Sep 2018 11:38pm
That was oddly compelling...the seeingly raw energy, almost ecstatic energy, the energy of your description seems to give it a much more unobvious layer of meing, i dont know
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
Thank you, Gesare, for sharing this. Every reader gets something different out of a poem, especially a poem written in a far less familiar form & style.
And welcome to the Deep.
~Jade🌋
And welcome to the Deep.
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
27th Sep 2018 11:54pm
Wow this is awesome, this is how i usually write my poems never knew there was a term for it
And the poem itself has amazing
And the poem itself has amazing
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
28th Sep 2018 00:40am
Why thank you, dear Poet! I love that my poem has shown you something you didn’t know you were doing all along. And it’s got a name!
Well done, friend.
~Jade🌋
Well done, friend.
~Jade🌋
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
Ahh, hello dear RFT, my friend! I’m delighted to see you here, where I’ve published a spill and scrub. A type I learned many years ago, which strikes when I least expect, and you just never know what the results will be.
It’s generous of you, sharing your thoughts with me like this. It means something dear that you enjoy this piece.
~Jade🌋
It’s generous of you, sharing your thoughts with me like this. It means something dear that you enjoy this piece.
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
28th Sep 2018 00:57am
Had no idea great poetry came so quickly for some.
If I had to give a name for mine it would have to be:
Grunt, wipe, flush, and wait.
Seriously, much enjoyed this.
If I had to give a name for mine it would have to be:
Grunt, wipe, flush, and wait.
Seriously, much enjoyed this.
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
28th Sep 2018 1:15am
*good-natured chuckle*
Oh ho, my goodness, amorous one, such an effort! But you do well as a poetess for such a brief time. Wait a couple more years, it won’t be as hard (no pun intended. Just keep swimming swimming swimming...
And thank you for stopping by for a read.
~Jade🌋
Oh ho, my goodness, amorous one, such an effort! But you do well as a poetess for such a brief time. Wait a couple more years, it won’t be as hard (no pun intended. Just keep swimming swimming swimming...
And thank you for stopping by for a read.
~Jade🌋
Re. Hot Plate
28th Sep 2018 4:15pm
in darkness, a light
waits, shining in numbers
and hears a call, not from a bird
tomcat
waits, shining in numbers
and hears a call, not from a bird
tomcat
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Re: Re. Hot Plate
1st Oct 2018 8:04am
It’s taken me a while to come back to this wonderful moment you’ve described, just so I might finally know what to say as a reply.
And I still don’t have the words (so much has happened since). I don’t see the words to write them here, but I can see the vision.
Your
Tigress
And I still don’t have the words (so much has happened since). I don’t see the words to write them here, but I can see the vision.
Your
Tigress