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he died a desolate death
desperate
and uneasy
trapped
walls of bedrock
had no chance
thin air his company
his echo his companion
his bones
two feet
from freedom
two minutes
after his death
life
as it was meant to be
written by someone
yet
nobody 'knows'
whom
and uneasy
trapped
walls of bedrock
had no chance
thin air his company
his echo his companion
his bones
two feet
from freedom
two minutes
after his death
life
as it was meant to be
written by someone
yet
nobody 'knows'
whom
Published 21st Sep 2018
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21st Sep 2018 3:30pm
Wonderful job with the line breaks and flow of this one ... especially the "yet" ...
22nd Sep 2018 12:39pm
welcome
is the poet admired.
welcome
is the review deep and keen insight
aprreciate immensely
both
is the poet admired.
welcome
is the review deep and keen insight
aprreciate immensely
both
Anonymous
21st Sep 2018 3:49pm
Wow! Powerful, and haunting!
I like that! Great job.
Matthew.
I like that! Great job.
Matthew.
22nd Sep 2018 12:41pm
welcome Matt
dear Friend
also welcome
is your kind and generous
review
well
the expression is an attempt
at story
rest, is my peers'
awesome imagination
their power
much obliged
dear bro
dear Friend
also welcome
is your kind and generous
review
well
the expression is an attempt
at story
rest, is my peers'
awesome imagination
their power
much obliged
dear bro
21st Sep 2018 4:18pm
This truly grabbed me... such sadness...
You have a way with giving voice to the voiceless. That's a talent on it own!
Beautiful write, my friend!
You have a way with giving voice to the voiceless. That's a talent on it own!
Beautiful write, my friend!
22nd Sep 2018 12:44pm
welcome
is the Friend admired
welcome
is the review kind
and generous
also welcome
is the humbling appreciation
well...
some voiceless
never gain it
only witness
to their agony
is the walls they're trapped inside
and sometimes
freedom escapes them
closer than they knew
honored.
is the Friend admired
welcome
is the review kind
and generous
also welcome
is the humbling appreciation
well...
some voiceless
never gain it
only witness
to their agony
is the walls they're trapped inside
and sometimes
freedom escapes them
closer than they knew
honored.
21st Sep 2018 4:36pm
22nd Sep 2018 12:46pm
Welcome
dear Ange
also welcome
is your generous appreciation
honored i am
the scribble
managed to project
some mystery.
humbled
is the inker.
dear Ange
also welcome
is your generous appreciation
honored i am
the scribble
managed to project
some mystery.
humbled
is the inker.
22nd Sep 2018 12:49pm
I believe when one leaves this world while doing what the enjoy,
there can be no better way.
I choose a death while living, over a death while waiting.
Your words here give reason for deeper thoughts.
Nicely done, 'lil brother.
there can be no better way.
I choose a death while living, over a death while waiting.
Your words here give reason for deeper thoughts.
Nicely done, 'lil brother.
22nd Sep 2018 1:06pm
welcome
is the Dear Sis
Welcome
is the Wise One!
also welcome
is the humbling
appreciation
well
true, your every single word Sis
just that
whoever wrote
the destiny
no one (in general) truly 'knows' Him
we only see
what He's written, destined for us
and sometimes
that makes us ask questions
questions like
why?
is the Dear Sis
Welcome
is the Wise One!
also welcome
is the humbling
appreciation
well
true, your every single word Sis
just that
whoever wrote
the destiny
no one (in general) truly 'knows' Him
we only see
what He's written, destined for us
and sometimes
that makes us ask questions
questions like
why?
