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Stoned Again
Did you ever get up
Because you can't go to sleep
With your head on the floor
And a bottle at your feet
Watch the sun coming up
Through blood stained eyes
And wish there was someone
To share the pain in your mind
But the man who was there
Has done come and gone
And before the sun sets
They'll be another along
And all that he knows
Is the touch of your skin
Because he's never tried
To see the beauty within
So now you're alone
And it's time to get stoned
Yeah, nowhere to go
And it's time to get stoned
Because you can't go to sleep
With your head on the floor
And a bottle at your feet
Watch the sun coming up
Through blood stained eyes
And wish there was someone
To share the pain in your mind
But the man who was there
Has done come and gone
And before the sun sets
They'll be another along
And all that he knows
Is the touch of your skin
Because he's never tried
To see the beauty within
So now you're alone
And it's time to get stoned
Yeah, nowhere to go
And it's time to get stoned
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Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 3:37pm
Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 4:03pm
Re. Stoned Again
Anonymous
18th Sep 2018 5:12pm
Very nice, Medinda.
On here, we can see the beauty inside you, without even meeting you.
You are a wonderful poet!
Matthew.
On here, we can see the beauty inside you, without even meeting you.
You are a wonderful poet!
Matthew.
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18th Sep 2018 5:17pm
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Anonymous
18th Sep 2018 5:32pm
Yes, life can be/ is sad, and disillusioning, but I guess that sorrow is the price you pay to be such a good poet...Hey! Why aren't I a better poet then??!!! Damn.
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Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 9:05pm
Re: Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 9:15pm
Great minds think alike, Sir Epic!
I've had the same feeling about this one.
Sing it for me : )
I've had the same feeling about this one.
Sing it for me : )
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19th Sep 2018 5:06am
Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 11:13pm
I love it. It's a great little catchy poem full of melancholy etc, etc & probably has deeper connotations than even I could decipher but...I dunno, can't resist a few suggestions. I hate being the one to say it all the time but I might have said:
But the man who was there
Has done one and gone
(cos it sounds funny & we're left wondering what the 'one' was, lol)
And with the end verse, I'd drop the agains, so it reads:
So now you're alone
And it's time to get stoned
Yeah, nowhere to go
It's time to get stoned
But the man who was there
Has done one and gone
(cos it sounds funny & we're left wondering what the 'one' was, lol)
And with the end verse, I'd drop the agains, so it reads:
So now you're alone
And it's time to get stoned
Yeah, nowhere to go
It's time to get stoned
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Re: Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 11:21pm
Billy, you are truly an honest critic and I love you for it. You make me a better writer. Thanks
Re: Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 11:24pm
But I'm confused because it says:
Has done come and gone
Probably sounds funny out there but is common dialect of The South
Has done come and gone
Probably sounds funny out there but is common dialect of The South
Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 11:33pm
Oh ok. Maybe a comma then after done. Has done, come and gone or maybe even 'come, done & gone,' cos he has to have come before he is done, if you get my drift, lol.
But yeah, you're right. It's an English expression. If you're told to 'go & do one' over here, it usually means f**k off! lol. ;-)
But yeah, you're right. It's an English expression. If you're told to 'go & do one' over here, it usually means f**k off! lol. ;-)
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Re: Re. Stoned Again
18th Sep 2018 11:37pm
Yeah, "done come and gone"
Means they've already (done) come and gone. Sippy thang.
No apologies or correction. I'm leaving that one in. Lol
Means they've already (done) come and gone. Sippy thang.
No apologies or correction. I'm leaving that one in. Lol
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18th Sep 2018 11:40pm
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18th Sep 2018 11:44pm
Re. Stoned Again
22nd Sep 2018 9:03pm
This piece could be sung against a slow acoustic guitar on a slow city street somewhere. Many passerby would hear and know and feel the truth in it whether they stopped or not.
I know I’ve been here before. I think many of us on DU probably have
I know I’ve been here before. I think many of us on DU probably have
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Re: Re. Stoned Again
22nd Sep 2018 10:03pm
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Re. Stoned Again
4th Jul 2021 3:04pm
Great ink... nice flow. Finding the beauty with in of someone is more Satisfying than their touch.
I understood the line “done come and gone” it’s like a hit and run.
I understood the line “done come and gone” it’s like a hit and run.
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