THE LADY WAITS

Great poem, amigo! I love the imagery you've created and the overall theme.

Nice work, and thanks for participating in my competition!

Muchisimas Gracias, Luna!  And thank you for the inspiration.

Melancholy and lovely writing, Gahdess. "In harmony crying" breaks my heart.  Yes, this is inspired work.

Thank you Sir Crow!  I'll admit getting choked up when that line came to me.  I really enjoyed this process because the story scenarios are endless.

Beautifully down my dear friend. Excellent wording and intriguing tale. Bravo. J

Thank you So much Juvenalis!  I do love telling tales.

Beautiful. I love the line "ink bleeds more from tears than from showers". And a bunch of others too, but that one's my favorite.

(My eye pounces on typos though - would you like me to point them out? Somehow I always feel guilty when I see something so irrelevant in a beautiful piece of work.... and in poetry you never know if someone's doing it on purpose)

Very much enjoyed this. :)

Thank you so much, Titanium!  I welcome your typo input.

3rd stanza, first line - I think that's probably supposed to be "of", not "or".
3rd stanza, last line - than instead of then.  Unless you meant "then", referring to time.... but I feel like that's a bit of a stretch.
(See, it's hard because sometimes people intentionally substitute words for effect....)

Thank you Titanium. Well spotted.  I can't believe I missed the "or" the many times I reviewed the piece.  I think, as author,  I revert to what I thought I wrote.  I am forever having to look up then/than rules so I needed the coaching 😁

The sonnet format seems to work really well with this type of imagery. I love how it blends so seamlessly into the picture. I may question just a couple of the full stops used in this just because it hinders the flow ever so slightly in places. Otherwise I think it’s a beautiful rendition.

Best of luck in the comp. Thanks for sharing.

-M

Merci beaucoup, Missy!  I am glad you enjoy the poem.  I do agree that there are wonky rythmns, especially in light of the traditional sonnet structure. I too thought,  when I first the picture,  this deserves a romantic form.

Thank you so much Orenda!  I am glad you like the piece.

you brought tears to my eyes and I'll leave
it like that.

sweetly contented

Thank you so much Howling! I am glad that you were so touched.  I too shed some tears while writing the piece. Love is a beautiful and, at times, devastating thing.