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..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
i say to them
if i mention...
and before we even get there
get this
the mere thought
of her
takes me places
well not those under the foothills of scenic
ice capped mountains
but places
like ...
i cannot mention
or put across in words
let us just say
how would you feel
burning
twisting and turning
on a bed of embers
in a deep dark space
and then
being removed
to a place amongst the comforting bed
of flowers
of aromas
of sunshine
enchanting the soul
where you feel removed
from all things pain?
so if the mere thought of that person
takes me there
imagine
where would her influence
on my ink
would take me?
and you ask me why do i write
and what brought me here?
if i mention...
and before we even get there
get this
the mere thought
of her
takes me places
well not those under the foothills of scenic
ice capped mountains
but places
like ...
i cannot mention
or put across in words
let us just say
how would you feel
burning
twisting and turning
on a bed of embers
in a deep dark space
and then
being removed
to a place amongst the comforting bed
of flowers
of aromas
of sunshine
enchanting the soul
where you feel removed
from all things pain?
so if the mere thought of that person
takes me there
imagine
where would her influence
on my ink
would take me?
and you ask me why do i write
and what brought me here?
Author's Note
written for one of the running comps...but decided against entry with respect to that person's honor.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 7:03pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 7:26pm
welcome
dear poet
firstly to the community that is Du
as well as
to the scribble.
appreciate immensely
the honor, the appreciation
and presence.
dear poet
firstly to the community that is Du
as well as
to the scribble.
appreciate immensely
the honor, the appreciation
and presence.
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 7:32pm
so beautiful dearest Cold One
a love brought the poet out in you...
so very romantic 🌹
love Brenda
a love brought the poet out in you...
so very romantic 🌹
love Brenda
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Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 7:36pm
welcome
dear friend
and poet admired!
welcome also
is your kind and generous review.
i honor your views
and appreciate them immensely...
dear friend
and poet admired!
welcome also
is your kind and generous review.
i honor your views
and appreciate them immensely...
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 9:01pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 9:03pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 9:04pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 9:10pm
:-)
Thank You for the (kick in the arse ;-) ) i mean encouragement ...an honor to be back amongst the Friends! Sir!
Thank You for the (kick in the arse ;-) ) i mean encouragement ...an honor to be back amongst the Friends! Sir!
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
30th Aug 2018 9:25pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
1st Sep 2018 11:35am
welcome
dear Tim!
glad you too know of the bliss! and 'those' places!
appreciate immensely
your presence
and your inputs.
always.
dear Tim!
glad you too know of the bliss! and 'those' places!
appreciate immensely
your presence
and your inputs.
always.
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
Anonymous
30th Aug 2018 11:16pm
... I think you should enter it. Hint. Hint.
I think it’s actually very well written and quite touching. I loved the question it posed.
2nd to last line I think it should be “and you ask me why do I write” - the “I” is missing.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
I think it’s actually very well written and quite touching. I loved the question it posed.
2nd to last line I think it should be “and you ask me why do I write” - the “I” is missing.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
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Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
1st Sep 2018 11:37am
:-)
welcome dear Missy!
thank you! so much!
both for your presence as well as the encouragement...and also at the same time, you fixing my mistake in the last line.
appreciation
immense.
of the visit, the feedback and the support. I have decided not to go ahead with entering purely for the reason mentioned in the author's note. I take your hint dearly though!!
C_F
welcome dear Missy!
thank you! so much!
both for your presence as well as the encouragement...and also at the same time, you fixing my mistake in the last line.
appreciation
immense.
of the visit, the feedback and the support. I have decided not to go ahead with entering purely for the reason mentioned in the author's note. I take your hint dearly though!!
C_F
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
1st Sep 2018 5:28am
A much enjoyed tribute to your inspiration, my friend, whether entered or not.
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Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
1st Sep 2018 11:40am
:-)
welcome
is the Artist admired!
Welcome
is the Friend!
glad is but a small word Teri knowing you enjoyed the scribble. Tribute...no just an ode yes! she's well alive...like they say long live the Queen! lol (hey worry not just pulling ya leg Sis!) :-))
appreciation
beyond words!
welcome
is the Artist admired!
Welcome
is the Friend!
glad is but a small word Teri knowing you enjoyed the scribble. Tribute...no just an ode yes! she's well alive...like they say long live the Queen! lol (hey worry not just pulling ya leg Sis!) :-))
appreciation
beyond words!
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
2nd Sep 2018 7:17pm
Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
2nd Sep 2018 7:20pm
well..i love your presence here bro
and also your view! though so far it is the opposite.. out of hell and back!
thanks Bro!
and also your view! though so far it is the opposite.. out of hell and back!
thanks Bro!
Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
It's all in the 3rd stanza for me. I just declinced to take part in the pub quiz here in The Admiral Nelson, Whitton, cos I don't feel confident of getting many questions right!
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Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
2nd Sep 2018 8:28pm
well...when you feel not like it, then yes i guess, the gut...is most of the times right! and there is comfort in making a decision early thereby the certainty.
i admire your keen eye dear poet!
appreciation.
i admire your keen eye dear poet!
appreciation.
Anonymous
- Edited 30th May 2019 3:51pm
6th Sep 2018 00:38am
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Re: Re. ..and they ask why i write and what brought me here
7th Sep 2018 10:56am
welcome
dear poet admired!
i also welcome
with deep appreciation
your mesmerizing feedback which
in all its essence nothing but a
beautiful poem on its own.
i read...and re-read...couldn't help but be
stunned by your ink there.
appreciation
beyond words.
dear poet admired!
i also welcome
with deep appreciation
your mesmerizing feedback which
in all its essence nothing but a
beautiful poem on its own.
i read...and re-read...couldn't help but be
stunned by your ink there.
appreciation
beyond words.