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A lie
They said from Satan we were blessed.
It was a gift in the shadows.
A key to Pandora's chest.
Yet the knife was on our neck.
Deceit from the darkness.
A promise which could not be met....
It was a gift in the shadows.
A key to Pandora's chest.
Yet the knife was on our neck.
Deceit from the darkness.
A promise which could not be met....
Published 16th Aug 2018
| Edited 20th Aug 2018
Author's Note
I just have little faith in the bulldogs governing this country.
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17th Aug 2018 00:21am
17th Aug 2018 00:22am
19th Aug 2018 1:38pm
Hey, I like your write
I strongly hate the ones running this country too, assuming you're from the same country, so I feel you on that.
There's just one itsy thing that bugs me, in the third like where you wrote "too" I believe you meant "to", and in the last line the word "in" doesn't seem to make much sense in the context. Of course it's your writing so you can leave it however you want, I'm just a bit of a stickler for detail!
I strongly hate the ones running this country too, assuming you're from the same country, so I feel you on that.
There's just one itsy thing that bugs me, in the third like where you wrote "too" I believe you meant "to", and in the last line the word "in" doesn't seem to make much sense in the context. Of course it's your writing so you can leave it however you want, I'm just a bit of a stickler for detail!
20th Aug 2018 1:09am
Thank you for your feed back,
I'm still working on my grammar, thank you again. ; )
I'm still working on my grammar, thank you again. ; )
