Rearranging the stars

Thanks man....as much as I love creating new inks, it wouldn't be as fulfilling without feedback. I really appreciate someone taking the time to check my work out. Those few seconds of time you take to read what I've posted and then comment are tremendously uplifting to me. Much more so then people ever realize. Thank you. Sorry for this lengthy reply. Condensing is for soup I always say! Haha (actually I just thought of that) but it made me laugh. Lol ;)

So tightly written. Excellent rhyme without sacrificing your message. Love the ending and the “ one with the key.” Incredible poetry!

Thank you so much. Your feed back really validated why I do this. Sometimes I feel like I'm just not doing it right. Like the words should be better. Then other days I nail it and I actually am proud of something I made. All comments are appreciated but there are others like the one you just gave me that hold substance. They tell me something and validate this is the only thing I was born with. It's my only real gift. Whether great or just ok...it's still a gift and I should keep on keeping on. Lol thank you so much. I'm gonna check out your page now. ;) Have a great day

You’re very welcome! You know all writers deal with self-doubt, etc. If we DON’T experience the doubt, I think we have a problem (in my opinion). You can’t get poetry wrong, and that’s one of the greatest things about it to me. Never give up...your work is great.

You speak poetry. I am reading your work right now and am overwhelmed at your skill. It's as good as it gets. In no way is this meant to be taken lightly but you were really born to do this. You have an immense gift...I'm in awe...I don't even know how to take it in. It makes me high. I have always been inspired by those that can leave goosebumps without the use of rhyme. So many people think it has to rhyme to be a poem. And it's clear you can rhyme with the best of them. Which isn't easy. But what's even more amazing is your ability to grab at a person's soul with your poems that don't rhyme. They're so real. And meaningful. I'm rambling on cause I really think it's so cool. Off the top of my head it reminds me of the book "a knight without armor" by jewel kilcher...mainly because of how it makes me feel. I always loved that book. It ispired me even though people sometimes laugh cause it's jewel. But those bitches be jealous haha ....girl can write...and so can you!! :)

This poem was really nice to read, and very heartfelt. I enjoyed the colorful contained within, although it was a bit depressing in parts. You did a good job expressing your feelings though! I also liked the simile you used in the beginning with the chain and the key. I actually use a similar comparison in a poem of mine called 'A Love Once Lost'. Check it out if you get a chance!

Anyway, you're a wonderful wordsmith, and I quite enjoyed your poem!