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Nicely written, Gahddess! I like the metaphors you've used to describe such a passionate and intimate event.

Well done!

Thank you so much, Luna! To me that attraction is very much like the flow of electricity. I appreciate your taking interest in my work. Muy amable.

Love, desire, lust
is in the air with this beauty.
plug--voltage..nice simile :)

If I may, I just had trouble with the flow 1S lines 3 and 4.
'when by time and distance
we are disconnected'

The whole poem is very concise
that imo it would be better to
" by time and distance
disconnected'

The 1S is setting the stage so it's okay (again in my opinion) to not mention 'we are' since the following stanzas you are being more elaborate.

Layla, thank you very much for the read and for the helpful suggestion. I made the change and it does indeed improve the flow of the piece. I always appreciate your kind words. You make me better.

Scene easy to visualise. Lovemaking can be a good way to recharge batteries!

Thank you Solomon for the read and the kind words.

Feeling it ... nice write GW ...

I think "feeling it" is the highest compliment for a poet. Thank you!

Sensual, and electrifying.  My favorite lines:

Your azure eyes sparkle
your porcelain skin glows
current seems to arc
between swollen nipples
and wanting chest

The electrical motif is right on.  Fine erotica with some juice.      

Thank you very much Sir Crow! I like the circuit concept because it fills both bodies with sensual current.

the space between mortals and immortals is vanquished, but taking effect by erotic union

but there is no punctuation, its a speed read, there is no time to savour any of the lines,

azures belong to the Greek islands, porcelain belong to the painted face of a japanise geisha,

these words became a crosswind in your poem;