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Treasonous Heart
My heart betrays me
backstabs and guts
with a twisted blade
Treasonous in nature
my heart bleeds out pain
then turns on me
making me afraid
Feelings that need exposing
written out on the page
fear comes riding in
causing me to delete my true face
My best poems erased
defaced and displaced
hiding the real me
my history and where i'm at today
backstabs and guts
with a twisted blade
Treasonous in nature
my heart bleeds out pain
then turns on me
making me afraid
Feelings that need exposing
written out on the page
fear comes riding in
causing me to delete my true face
My best poems erased
defaced and displaced
hiding the real me
my history and where i'm at today
Published 14th Oct 2011
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14th Oct 2011 7:34pm
I like it, it's simple, honest - we all write, erase and ruin believe me. Good!
14th Oct 2011 7:39pm
ty LA I needed a boost today..i've been so mad at myself for not having the courage to leave some of my more real poems posted..peace Crim :)
Anonymous
14th Oct 2011 7:55pm
Unveiling (crimsin),
We all have that inner critic, that once released, does us all a little harm from time to time. Sometimes you just have to trick it into going into the closet and slamming the door shut for a while. You'll survive without it for a few days, believe me ; ) Enjoyed!
tornado
We all have that inner critic, that once released, does us all a little harm from time to time. Sometimes you just have to trick it into going into the closet and slamming the door shut for a while. You'll survive without it for a few days, believe me ; ) Enjoyed!
tornado
14th Oct 2011 8:01pm
Anonymous
14th Oct 2011 8:19pm
I like your poem crim, but i believe in following one's heart because whether you do or do not there will be pain. If you follow it at least you are on the path to a happiness that is attainable and you will never cease being honest with yourself. It is not our hearts that betrays us...it is we that betray our hearts.
14th Oct 2011 8:49pm
Good advise Shaman..I betrayed my heart when I deleted some of my more soulful poems..It was fear that got me..fear of what people would think..ty for such a thoughtful comment..peace Crim :)
Anonymous
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15th Oct 2011 10:15pm
ty Veliqua for such a beautiful comment..touching my heart..maybe some day I will be brave enough to be honest and not delete..peace to you always Crim :)
14th Oct 2011 10:22pm
You have been doing some serious purging of the past and reaching deep down inside to give birth to the new you. Never be afraid to expose your soul. You may also be able to recover poems you deleted if they were posted on-line. Often times they get archived and if you search on a line or the title, you'd be surprised what comes up. Even if you can't remember the whole line, put part of it in quotes and if you posted it with your name, add that in the search. Peace, jj
15th Oct 2011 10:18pm
JJ ty for such a thoughtful and kind comment..you always make me smile..fear is going to keep me veiled i'm thinking I will stick with fantasy as fear gets the best of me..peace Crim :)
15th Oct 2011 11:25pm
15th Oct 2011 11:33pm
Ravenmoon I try to be brave then the fire of fear licks at my skin and I run away..you are the beautiful one..ty for saying i'm beautiful you touched my heart..peace Crim :)
