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(a Sonnet of betrayal from long ago)
I scan galactic coastlines that reckon,
Stretching endlessly through time warpage thus.
For how your pale crusades lull and beckon,
As I seek parallels in quietus.
While my own floats free near your fingertips
With each passing nano second's death knell,
Doub'ling the length from my scarified hips
Where a flaming phoenix once rose and fell.
There never were past lives serenity,
Since the way I think there are no seashores.
Nor siren song's echo’d meant so for me,
Why ergo I'm drifting further from yours.
And there's no more time for night's passing ships
To distant equators. Make sail! Eclipse!
Copyright©️Jade Pandora 2018. All Rights Reserved.
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2018
I scan galactic coastlines that reckon,
Stretching endlessly through time warpage thus.
For how your pale crusades lull and beckon,
As I seek parallels in quietus.
While my own floats free near your fingertips
With each passing nano second's death knell,
Doub'ling the length from my scarified hips
Where a flaming phoenix once rose and fell.
There never were past lives serenity,
Since the way I think there are no seashores.
Nor siren song's echo’d meant so for me,
Why ergo I'm drifting further from yours.
And there's no more time for night's passing ships
To distant equators. Make sail! Eclipse!
Copyright©️Jade Pandora 2018. All Rights Reserved.
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2018
Published 24th Apr 2018
Author's Note
This is my Day 24 in this year’s April NaPoWriMo. Credit: NASA stock.
qui·e·tus
/ˌkwīˈēdəs/
noun
death or something that causes death, regarded as a release from life.
qui·e·tus
/ˌkwīˈēdəs/
noun
death or something that causes death, regarded as a release from life.
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24th Apr 2018 9:25am
wow, there is much going on here (and not going on here!)
'Where a flaming phoenix once rose and fell. '
'Nor siren song's echo’d meant so for me,'
'And there's no more time for night's passing ships'
what a potent lament. nice job expressing the betrayal of an unruly sea.
'Where a flaming phoenix once rose and fell. '
'Nor siren song's echo’d meant so for me,'
'And there's no more time for night's passing ships'
what a potent lament. nice job expressing the betrayal of an unruly sea.
And/ or disturbingly unfaithful.
Thank you, poet, for your appreciation & input.
Thank you, poet, for your appreciation & input.
24th Apr 2018 3:22pm
I feel it -
I love that it is in sonnet form - it emphasizes - in that sonnets are generally held as forms for love poems
Excellent writing... and image selection
I love that it is in sonnet form - it emphasizes - in that sonnets are generally held as forms for love poems
Excellent writing... and image selection
24th Apr 2018 4:22pm
Aw thank you, Thomcat, I'm glad you could feel it, and yes now that you mention it, the sonnet form is beautifully adept at such presentations! But ohhh, it was wonderful to be able to READ it to you minutes ago, even with my early morning frog-in-the-throat voice!
And thank you once again for the RL honors!
~Tiger ( the "other" T )
And thank you once again for the RL honors!
~Tiger ( the "other" T )
24th Apr 2018 8:12pm
24th Apr 2018 10:46pm
Thank you, moon’s reflection, I’ve missed you.
As for the rest of my words, they have started to congeal into something that I’m going to save and give to you later. So for now, suffice to say that I’m so pleased to have seen you here.
🌜🐅
As for the rest of my words, they have started to congeal into something that I’m going to save and give to you later. So for now, suffice to say that I’m so pleased to have seen you here.
🌜🐅
24th Apr 2018 11:15pm
I’ll be publishing my reply to you shortly, dear moon child. It will be in your updates. My gift to you.
🌜🐅
🌜🐅
3rd May 2018 8:06am
lol i knew i'd love reading you ... i rarely come across someone who is as cryptic as they are telling .. ( lyrically ) ... that is an unusual yet awesome talent .. betrayal has never been described so gracefully .. :)
3rd May 2018 8:12am
Why thank you, Devilish, your instinct at a first pick from my ink is impeccable! How you've honored me.
