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Absolute Zero
One day in class, the teacher asked,
“What is the lowest temperature called?”
I’d like to say I was paying attention,
But there was a girl and I was enthralled.
Her name was Chloe, she sat in front of me,
Her hair was long, golden, soft to the touch.
The aroma was heady and sweet, like lilac.
I was under her spell, it was all too much.
Daydreams of her soft lips filled my thoughts.
I wondered how they would taste on mine
Or how she looked when she smiled at me,
I was all aflutter as I looked for a sign.
As I was thinking of my chances with her,
I suddenly heard, “Charlotte, Do you know?”
My thoughts came crashing back to class
And I sighed. “Absolute Zero, Mr. Snow.”
“What is the lowest temperature called?”
I’d like to say I was paying attention,
But there was a girl and I was enthralled.
Her name was Chloe, she sat in front of me,
Her hair was long, golden, soft to the touch.
The aroma was heady and sweet, like lilac.
I was under her spell, it was all too much.
Daydreams of her soft lips filled my thoughts.
I wondered how they would taste on mine
Or how she looked when she smiled at me,
I was all aflutter as I looked for a sign.
As I was thinking of my chances with her,
I suddenly heard, “Charlotte, Do you know?”
My thoughts came crashing back to class
And I sighed. “Absolute Zero, Mr. Snow.”
Author's Note
My daydreams get the best of me in class sometimes.
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Re. Absolute Zero
Anonymous
6th Apr 2018 1:41pm
Very tender...
Almost dream like...
I love this direction
Love always Autumn xoxo
Almost dream like...
I love this direction
Love always Autumn xoxo

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6th Apr 2018 1:50pm
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6th Apr 2018 3:40pm
Re. Absolute Zero
6th Apr 2018 10:22pm
I cannot know if it was intentional, but the syllabic flow of this write is like music. The way the O sounds hit is so symmetrical. Enjoyed this sweet reverie.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. Absolute Zero
8th Apr 2018 1:30am
pot Increases intelligence Your comments are entertaining. Thank you. .
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Re. Absolute Zero
7th Apr 2018 1:29am
Love your clever story telling here. Bringing it all together in full circle .
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7th Apr 2018 1:10pm
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9th Apr 2018 9:53am
He must be from one of those places where it's not ok for girls to fall in love with each other... and people there still live in caves...
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Re. Absolute Zero
7th Apr 2018 8:09pm
Re. Absolute Zero
8th Apr 2018 4:29am
Have to agree with the many here..
Wonderful dream-like flow to this gentle poem.
Fragrant & bright.
Nice..!
Love,
H
Wonderful dream-like flow to this gentle poem.
Fragrant & bright.
Nice..!
Love,
H
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8th Apr 2018 4:34am
Re. Absolute Zero
The feelings you've expressed remind me of my crushes from my school days. You should express them too her so they don't become bitter regrets of what might have been...
The ending made me chuckle, even though the sadness of the moment was palpable. Very sweetly expressed and I think you should tell her. Frankly Charlotte, I think she'll give a damn!
JJ
Oh, and your teacher's name was Mr. snow and he was asking about the cold? Lol, if you didn't say that on purpose it's all he more funny, in a bitter-sweet sort of way!
The ending made me chuckle, even though the sadness of the moment was palpable. Very sweetly expressed and I think you should tell her. Frankly Charlotte, I think she'll give a damn!
JJ
Oh, and your teacher's name was Mr. snow and he was asking about the cold? Lol, if you didn't say that on purpose it's all he more funny, in a bitter-sweet sort of way!
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Re. Absolute Zero
13th Apr 2018 5:04am
I shouldn't say this but you'll soon learn ima gonna, i couldn't concentrate in my world survival was all I could muster. Got an idea from Poetryman, have you considered writing her a poem even if only to post here, I would slip it somewhere in secrecy sorta like a secret admirer, Charlotte you owe yourself, deserve to have this wee bit of deliciousness. No worries bout being"tomish" I'm all female &an Aries, born of fire & masculinity, so I suppose we are both tomish, been called much worse lol Much Love and Mad Respect,
me👭💞
me👭💞
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Re. Absolute Zero
25th May 2018 7:50am
Hey C,
This piece is vividly vandalizing.....beautiful...I love the picture by the way :))
This piece is vividly vandalizing.....beautiful...I love the picture by the way :))
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Re. Absolute Zero
22nd Jun 2018 4:49pm
I’m not sure where “tomish” came from, didn’t see what they had seen. Reading it twice I just found it dreamy, snapping back to reality as the question is asked at the end.
Another great write.
Another great write.
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