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Limpid
Foam-capped waves
a mountanous sight;
an ocean bleeding
afterlight
The great white Moon
a circling shark;
devouring darkness
and starry night
Morning bestirs
drunk on poems
reveal ductile bodies
limpid with Love
~
a mountanous sight;
an ocean bleeding
afterlight
The great white Moon
a circling shark;
devouring darkness
and starry night
Morning bestirs
drunk on poems
reveal ductile bodies
limpid with Love
~
Published 16th Mar 2018
Author's Note
For my J, all the colors of sunrise
reside in your morning poetry
💜🌞💏
reside in your morning poetry
💜🌞💏
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Anonymous
16th Mar 2018 1:21am
Uhmmmmm
I Love these lines:
"The great white Moon
a circling shark;
devouring darkness
and starry night "
Such evocative imagery!
And the staggering reinforces the lapping effect of the ocean waves. 💕
Awesome! 💑💋
I Love You. 💜
I Love these lines:
"The great white Moon
a circling shark;
devouring darkness
and starry night "
Such evocative imagery!
And the staggering reinforces the lapping effect of the ocean waves. 💕
Awesome! 💑💋
I Love You. 💜
16th Mar 2018 1:50am
16th Mar 2018 2:54am
16th Mar 2018 12:32pm
16th Mar 2018 4:58am
I really did get chills here; the good kind. The moon a circling shark is such an awesome metaphor, WOW.
16th Mar 2018 12:33pm
16th Mar 2018 2:54pm
Well my dear, this was as smooth as the Otha side O dee pillow! lol...truly, beautifully expressed ink :)
16th Mar 2018 5:28pm
the metaphors n the poetry in motion at its brevity best ...esp. loved the last two verses so much potently intense n evoking the love so limpid love. excellent poetry Ahavati xx <3
16th Mar 2018 11:50pm
16th Mar 2018 9:50pm
that claw and furry mountain
remind me of the creatures in
'where the wild things are'
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Where_the_Wild_Things_Are
remind me of the creatures in
'where the wild things are'
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Where_the_Wild_Things_Are
16th Mar 2018 10:46pm
16th Mar 2018 11:59pm
Sweet, Nice, Good. Cool.
(i'm pretty wordlessly limpid right now. HA)
(i'm pretty wordlessly limpid right now. HA)
17th Mar 2018 10:07am
25th Mar 2018 7:11pm
A fantastic poem that creates it's own atmosphere - descriptions are exquisite :-)))))))))
Huge LIKE!
Huge LIKE!
25th Mar 2018 7:45pm
13th Apr 2018 1:32pm
I just joined DUP and it is for poetry like this that I did so. Every syllable carries a charge to the overall effect the poem has, not one is wasted, and each one is beautiful. High-level pictures of natural beauty that come to me effortlessly, thanks to this succinct and powerful delivery. Thank you for the inspiration.
13th Apr 2018 1:42pm
