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Thoughts
Send shivers to stars afar
Sink
Marianas Trench
Deep.
Mangle the mind, knot and mar
Shape lips, let silent words seep
Let voiceless echoes catch a glance
While gesture guides the blinded voice,
While dream neglects the circumstance
And leads the way to mocking choice.
Now try
Fathom the great distance of the future
To solder the gaps of a heart-shaped suture
And live in an ecstasy of endless possibility.
Sink
Marianas Trench
Deep.
Mangle the mind, knot and mar
Shape lips, let silent words seep
Let voiceless echoes catch a glance
While gesture guides the blinded voice,
While dream neglects the circumstance
And leads the way to mocking choice.
Now try
Fathom the great distance of the future
To solder the gaps of a heart-shaped suture
And live in an ecstasy of endless possibility.
Published 6th Oct 2011
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Anonymous
6th Oct 2011 3:00pm
"To solder the gaps of a heart-shaped suture
And live in an ecstasy of endless possibility."
I take my hat off to you, that was damn good imagery. It kept my focus the whole way through the poem.
Welcome to DUP, hope to read more from you soon!
And live in an ecstasy of endless possibility."
I take my hat off to you, that was damn good imagery. It kept my focus the whole way through the poem.
Welcome to DUP, hope to read more from you soon!
7th Oct 2011 00:08am
8th Oct 2011 10:02pm
An interesting use of iambic tetrameter in the middle of an otherwise meterless piece. I liked the sound and depth of the phrases you used, and the line breaks are well spaced. Some good work here.
