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She knocked her socks off
Stealing his heart as she did
They laughed their selves outward loudly
That summer when they met
You might say it was fated
As their meeting was unintended
Unlikely
Unexpected
Just as her scent
Eluded promise
They knew they were meant to be together
It was a feeling that would last forever
Racing in figures
Of eight
Carrying the weight
Of life in their hands
They picked their time
In quick sands
Played on the beach
By love bands
Stealing his heart as she did
They laughed their selves outward loudly
That summer when they met
You might say it was fated
As their meeting was unintended
Unlikely
Unexpected
Just as her scent
Eluded promise
They knew they were meant to be together
It was a feeling that would last forever
Racing in figures
Of eight
Carrying the weight
Of life in their hands
They picked their time
In quick sands
Played on the beach
By love bands
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Re. Impress
3rd Mar 2018 2:50pm
dearest David this line grabbed me
though i'm unsure why..
"They picked their time
In quick sands"
my interpretation is they were fated to love one another
but perhaps standing in quick sand like circumstances..
stellar ink either way..
love Brenda
though i'm unsure why..
"They picked their time
In quick sands"
my interpretation is they were fated to love one another
but perhaps standing in quick sand like circumstances..
stellar ink either way..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Impress
3rd Mar 2018 5:18pm
Lovely Brenda,
I think it has to do with the urgency of Fate, you know, act now or forever be lost. I dunno. I'm not always able to convey more meaning than that stated. Appreciate your feedback, as always.
Love...David
I think it has to do with the urgency of Fate, you know, act now or forever be lost. I dunno. I'm not always able to convey more meaning than that stated. Appreciate your feedback, as always.
Love...David
Re: Re. Impress
3rd Mar 2018 5:20pm
ahh I see David yeah hmm fate stood out to me because as of lately she's been finding her way into my writes as well..
excellent ink..
love Brenda
excellent ink..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Impress
3rd Mar 2018 5:20pm
Re. Impress
4th Mar 2018 10:08pm
When two become one and the whole becomes all there is...love expressed so deeply David.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Impress
7th Mar 2018 6:45pm
Interesting to me that this is not my usual genre but has become increasingly so of late. I do agree with respect to two becoming one for the whole, although this is very rare and can only be achieved when one has properly disposed of one's ego. Hey, I'm no expert.
Best to you Harry....David
Best to you Harry....David
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