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blues days
the day bled blue
& cursed the sun that shone upon it
he was unwise
telling only lies
day longed for night
to cover his shame
but the night blared
with a bright, neon moon
a strobe light of blame
revealed his sin
he had nowhere to hide his face
so he took cover in denial
demons mocked his folly
they dug in deep
& said
"hide in the black while you can
we'll see you tomorrow
where all your cloaks of deceit
will be stripped from you
& you're left naked"
so day cried to the gods
who had power over the darkness
requesting it be beat back
vowing he would stand true
inside the light of an honest sun
no longer seeking the cover
of a liar's shadow
he promised given another chance
he would keep to the path of beauty
where sunflowers seeds of hope planted
represent his compassionate acts
now in full bloom
they mark his progress
along the line of fate
his good deeds haven't gone unnoticed
& for this he will be rewarded
the gods keep record of a heart
who down deep is honest
today his demons go hungry
fate will wait for his call
wait for the day to ring true
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Re. blues days
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 2:20pm
Lies will always find their way to the surface, no matter how hard they try to hide. For they have no place, nothing to truly call their own space. So they drift ever to the top where they're exposed. I love how you express that here. And how you show compassion for the truly sorry heart. Very beautiful. I love you, my beautiful Dark Angel
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 2:52pm
thank you beautiful Willow yes they will not remained cloaked to be revealed as truth in their naked state.. the day will ring true in time..
I love you..
love Brenda
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. blues days
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 2:56pm
Lies only lie in shelter for so long, when there are no more hiding places they’ll always be exposed.
Beautiful as ever Crim :)
Beautiful as ever Crim :)
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Re: Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 3:11pm
thank you beautiful Sophie yes lies will be revealed in time.. thank you for seeing the beauty in this write..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 3:19pm
"hide in the black while you can
we'll see you tomorrow
where all your cloaks of deceit
will be stripped from you
& you're left naked"
This chunk in particular stood out as a chilling, narrative sort of punch. Masterful work!
we'll see you tomorrow
where all your cloaks of deceit
will be stripped from you
& you're left naked"
This chunk in particular stood out as a chilling, narrative sort of punch. Masterful work!
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Re: Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 3:35pm
thank you beautiful Atomik thrilled that part stood out for you yeah when my demons speak it my writes it's always menacing,, I love your thoughts & visits..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 3:38pm
Just remember, love, even an honest sun can create a liar's eclipse. Lies hide in the shadows, so as long you stay in the light, you should be able to avoid the lies. Or might you be so blinded by light that you don't see shadowed lies at all? That's for you to decide.
Beautiful write. Keep 'em coming.
~ T
Beautiful write. Keep 'em coming.
~ T
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Re: Re. blues days
9th Feb 2018 4:01pm
thank you dearest Tryston interesting perspective you could do a write on that theory I deeply appreciate your thoughts & visits..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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9th Feb 2018 7:49pm
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9th Feb 2018 11:33pm
Re. blues days
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 7:21pm
"Gods keep record of a heart
who down deep is honest
today his demons go hungry"
I love this line
It really speaks In volumes
Excellent write here
Love Autumn
who down deep is honest
today his demons go hungry"
I love this line
It really speaks In volumes
Excellent write here
Love Autumn
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9th Feb 2018 8:44pm
Re. blues days
Anonymous
19th Feb 2018 2:37am
Well My love, you know how I feel about such things...I despise them, don’t partake in them and typically can see them...I can only hope those of us who are honest do indeed get rewarded because the other way to be is actually easier...
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxo Taryn
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. blues days
1st Mar 2018 1:32pm
thank you my love yes I know you to be honorable in your actions and words..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
Re. blues days
23rd Feb 2018 8:17am
Lies beget lies and are usually easily discovered the problem then is the question of forgiveness of which I am not a fan - I value honesty above all things :-)))
Huge Like :-)))) Huge Hugssss :-)))))
Huge Like :-)))) Huge Hugssss :-)))))
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Re. blues days
27th Feb 2018 7:16pm
Those who learn from their mistakes deserve to be redeemed! Everyone deserves a second chance!
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Re: Re. blues days
1st Mar 2018 1:33pm
thank you Xmar so much wisdom in you I felt absolved by your comment :)
love Brenda
love Brenda