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gothic roses
the fog echoed its mechanical voice
it was lonely
& sought a victim to confuse
it was me who got lost in the grey
then the razor spoke to me
it wanted to kiss flesh
i put it far from me
before it could jump into my hand
my gothic roses bled pain
in their time of melancholy hurt
they stole the breath from me
as i keen for what they represent
they are the death of all hope
blooms of regret
i press them so I will remember
so as not to forget
witness the bleak
as it bleeds from my pen
taste its flavor
it's mellow
spiced with my screams
the night drained me
drank off my soul
as i reached to the darkness
it came into me
& took control
finally i rested in the hands
of my tormentors
& burned there
for an eternity
it was lonely
& sought a victim to confuse
it was me who got lost in the grey
then the razor spoke to me
it wanted to kiss flesh
i put it far from me
before it could jump into my hand
my gothic roses bled pain
in their time of melancholy hurt
they stole the breath from me
as i keen for what they represent
they are the death of all hope
blooms of regret
i press them so I will remember
so as not to forget
witness the bleak
as it bleeds from my pen
taste its flavor
it's mellow
spiced with my screams
the night drained me
drank off my soul
as i reached to the darkness
it came into me
& took control
finally i rested in the hands
of my tormentors
& burned there
for an eternity
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Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 7:25am
Raven, words cannot describe how much I love this piece. I am in awe of this piece and your writing skills. I love roses so much. Beautiful piece all together. I also love how they aren't standard roses which makes this piece stand out even more.
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 7:34am
thank you most graciously beautiful poetess for such a lovely comment.. I am both humbled & honored i'm blushing here..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. gothic roses
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 7:31am
No my beautiful. Not ever will you rest with your tormentors. Tormentors never rest. After they are done with us. They keep feeding.
Respectively,
Beth
Respectively,
Beth
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 7:36am
thank you beautiful Beth
you are right of course
I can't rest with them
though it seems the easiest route..
live to fight another day..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts & presence..
love Raven
you are right of course
I can't rest with them
though it seems the easiest route..
live to fight another day..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts & presence..
love Raven
Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 7:40am
A dark reflection. Not sure what to say about this poem, but I did really like the darkness of it ☺
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 7:42am
thank you dearest LK i'm happy you enjoyed
a taste of the darkness..
it's just where my muse led..
love Raven
a taste of the darkness..
it's just where my muse led..
love Raven
Re. gothic roses
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 1:47pm
Roses are symbolism of so much in this life and this is a beautiful write dear Raven.
Thank you for sharing xo
Thank you for sharing xo
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 4:41pm
thank you beautiful Star for seeing beauty in this dark write..
love Raven
love Raven
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Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 4:52pm
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 5:09pm
thank you most graciously Ghost I am deeply humbled by your comment.. wonderfully deep lyrics I think it goes with this write perfectly..
love Raven
love Raven
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Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 8:59pm
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Re. gothic roses
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 6:08pm
you always make me clutch and break my unpolished gemstone and pearls,
loving you woman!
💎
loving you woman!
💎
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 6:22pm
thank you beautiful lady for feeling me so deeply..
love you dear one..
Raven
love you dear one..
Raven
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Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 8:20pm
Don't let them wear you down, beautiful Raven. Never rest with the tormentors. Give them hell every minute of your existence. Just as they deserve. Your reference to gothic roses brought to mind those windows in gothic architecture. Intricate and stunningly beautiful when the light shines through them. And this is how I see you as well, Raven.
...Willow
...Willow
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Re: Re. gothic roses
18th Jan 2018 8:26pm
aw thank you beautiful Willow for seeing me in such a loving light..this came from a weary night.. I will give them hell..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. gothic roses
20th Jan 2018 00:58am
this is not simply a poem - it is clearly a work of art, of that I have no doubt :-)))) darkly beautiful - sending Scottish wild man vibes to kick fuck out of your tormentors
Huge Big warm Hugs :-))))))
Huge Big warm Hugs :-))))))
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Re: Re. gothic roses
20th Jan 2018 1:04am
thank you graciously dearest David for such a beautiful comment that gifted me smiles :)
love & hugs..
Raven
love & hugs..
Raven
Re. gothic roses
20th Jan 2018 10:21pm
Sexy dark depression ink. It brought personal tears to my soul. Such a talent that I admire.
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20th Jan 2018 10:26pm
Re. gothic roses
Anonymous
24th Jan 2018 9:31am
A fantastic dark masterpiece!! Amazing!!
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