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We Are But Shreds Of Misery
**Inspired By The Movie: The Edge Of Seventeen**
We don't know who we destroy
While we destroy ourselves
While we're busy self- loathing
And tip-toeing on ledges
There is someone who loves us
Desperately clinging to tiny bits of fabric
Frantic fingers grasping clammy hands
Trying to pull us back
Into welcoming, comforting, forgiving arms
We can't see through our own tears
to see the balled up fists of frustration
At our lack of love for ourselves
We don't know who gets torn apart
watching us tear ourselves to shreds
The ones who love us
Just want us to love us... wholeheartedly
We don't know who we destroy
While we destroy ourselves
While we're busy self- loathing
And tip-toeing on ledges
There is someone who loves us
Desperately clinging to tiny bits of fabric
Frantic fingers grasping clammy hands
Trying to pull us back
Into welcoming, comforting, forgiving arms
We can't see through our own tears
to see the balled up fists of frustration
At our lack of love for ourselves
We don't know who gets torn apart
watching us tear ourselves to shreds
The ones who love us
Just want us to love us... wholeheartedly
Published 13th Jan 2018
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13th Jan 2018 10:40pm
i think you worded lines 1-8 really well. although i think the next couple lines are just a bit less strong, it's really nice that you kept up the tearing/fabric theme throughout the entire piece of writing. aside from all that, the message itself rings true.
enjoyable read, thanks for posting it!
enjoyable read, thanks for posting it!
13th Jan 2018 10:46pm
Thanks for the feedback, this is definitely a first draft and will eventually be edited. But I do agree, the last lines could be written differently.
