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a Quickie
A Quickie of poetry from a lover of verse
Even tired old eyes like mine need a rest
From making love to your rhythms and rhymes
And absorbing the sensations from your inspirations
Months of getting high on the beat of passionate souls
Has filled my heart with empty unrequited holes
Overload has set in over my aging electrical grid
A tunneling upgrade is required or my train will derail
Rusty bridges in need of repair nearing collapse
Warnings at crossings fail to drop and stop traffic
Collisions are imminent if my engine isn't shut down
While my passengers impatiently desire my love
Persistent high speed reading has rattled my tracks
My foundation is developing dangerous cracks
The conflict between addiction to sensual verse
And craving deep sleep is a nightmarish curse
Even tired old eyes like mine need a rest
From making love to your rhythms and rhymes
And absorbing the sensations from your inspirations
Months of getting high on the beat of passionate souls
Has filled my heart with empty unrequited holes
Overload has set in over my aging electrical grid
A tunneling upgrade is required or my train will derail
Rusty bridges in need of repair nearing collapse
Warnings at crossings fail to drop and stop traffic
Collisions are imminent if my engine isn't shut down
While my passengers impatiently desire my love
Persistent high speed reading has rattled my tracks
My foundation is developing dangerous cracks
The conflict between addiction to sensual verse
And craving deep sleep is a nightmarish curse
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Re. a Quicky
3rd Jan 2018 7:57pm
This kinda sucks, so be gentle. Very soon I'm going to force myself to take a week off from reading or writing poetry. I just hit my 5th consecutive month of being among the op critiquers, a great honor indeed, and somehow was awarded a trophy for a reading competition I didn't even know was going on... all reminders that I need a break before I breakdown.
I don't think more than a day has gone by, except when DUP went off-line, when I did not sign on since I joined here in 2011, and before hat I was on half a dozen other poetry sites since I got on the internet in 1998.
I don't know if I can handle a whole week away. I'm already suffering from withdrawal...
JJ
I don't think more than a day has gone by, except when DUP went off-line, when I did not sign on since I joined here in 2011, and before hat I was on half a dozen other poetry sites since I got on the internet in 1998.
I don't know if I can handle a whole week away. I'm already suffering from withdrawal...
JJ
Re. a Quicky
3rd Jan 2018 8:50pm
I really, really, really feel this. It's a joy beyond joys, but it's exhausting, and I'm not even that prolific here. It's a commitment and service to comment and critique; and I thank you heartily for your gift. I know I've certainly benefited from your presence on my pieces, and appreciate it.
Personally right now, my children are young and I devote most of my time to them in some capacity. However, between here and DeviantArt, all of my commenting (again, which isn't as frequent as yours) is nearly like a part-time job some days, I've spent hours commenting, and attempting to respond to messages. I can't collab with everyone who I admire and would like to, and there's always much, much more to respond to even when I'm done. And it is weird to go 24 hours without being online, Christmas was odd.
Take all the time you need. We all cannot possibly keep up with all of us, and hell...you gotta have time for the other facets if your life, which I'm sure are quite worthwhile. I think we all need this message <3
Personally right now, my children are young and I devote most of my time to them in some capacity. However, between here and DeviantArt, all of my commenting (again, which isn't as frequent as yours) is nearly like a part-time job some days, I've spent hours commenting, and attempting to respond to messages. I can't collab with everyone who I admire and would like to, and there's always much, much more to respond to even when I'm done. And it is weird to go 24 hours without being online, Christmas was odd.
Take all the time you need. We all cannot possibly keep up with all of us, and hell...you gotta have time for the other facets if your life, which I'm sure are quite worthwhile. I think we all need this message <3
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Re: Re. a Quicky
3rd Jan 2018 9:11pm
Thank you AB! That was a most heart-warming response!
Not exactly sure when I will sign off, maybe tomorrow... i see so many good poems and I keep trying to tell myself they will be here when I get back...
I can't just go cold turkey!!!
JJ
Not exactly sure when I will sign off, maybe tomorrow... i see so many good poems and I keep trying to tell myself they will be here when I get back...
I can't just go cold turkey!!!
JJ
Re. a Quicky
It matters not the position of ones feet
for life moves on at it's own timely beat
and one must consider, when time for a break
for the resting of mind, no one can fake
so, turn off your light, go do something else
and then you'll return, back to the top shelf.
Know where you're coming from JJ,
took mine over Christmas and missed
my 6th straight month as a TC, but it was needed.
Now working on catching up.
Go rest.
T.
for life moves on at it's own timely beat
and one must consider, when time for a break
for the resting of mind, no one can fake
so, turn off your light, go do something else
and then you'll return, back to the top shelf.
Know where you're coming from JJ,
took mine over Christmas and missed
my 6th straight month as a TC, but it was needed.
Now working on catching up.
Go rest.
T.
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Re: Re. a Quicky
3rd Jan 2018 11:18pm
Thanks for the poem Teri!
Great advice!
I guess you'll just have to fill in my spot on the TC list... lol
JJ
Great advice!
I guess you'll just have to fill in my spot on the TC list... lol
JJ
Re: Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 00:08am
Re: Re. a Quicky
5th Jan 2018 2:27am
I thought I saw a comment somewhere that you were leaving. Maybe I was DUPinating... lol
JJ
JJ
Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 1:54am
Love this to shreds..
may your rest be full of regenerative bless..
Thank you for being in here for us to read your wonderful works
Very much admired,
<3
H
may your rest be full of regenerative bless..
Thank you for being in here for us to read your wonderful works
Very much admired,
<3
H
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Re: Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 3:43am
Geeeeeeeeezzzzzz H... all this love is makin me smile and not wanna go. How am I supposed to relax knowin there's so much love I'll be missin??? I know it's only gonna be a week but I'm gonna be all stressed out by the time I come back. No way I'm gonna last more than two or three days and be so hungry for poems I'll binge for the next few weeks and end up in first place on the tc list, lololol!!!
Jeepers creepers, what's a guy gotta do to get a little shut eye around this place???
JJ
Jeepers creepers, what's a guy gotta do to get a little shut eye around this place???
JJ
Re. a Quicky
dearest JJ you are a true lover of poetry
you live & breathe it..
I can see how you could be overloaded
we put so much passion & emotion into our writes
that it can easily overwhelm & drain a soul..
I feel this way too at times but I do take breaks for days at a time
to just recharge.. I don't write or read during those periods..
I just veg. on tv which I really don't care for & rest..
you will be missed this week but you deserve some rest
your dedication to this can't be denied I too came in 2011
it's hard to believe we've been knowing & knocking about these halls seven years now..
love you JJ..
get some rest
& come back refreshed..
love Brenda
you live & breathe it..
I can see how you could be overloaded
we put so much passion & emotion into our writes
that it can easily overwhelm & drain a soul..
I feel this way too at times but I do take breaks for days at a time
to just recharge.. I don't write or read during those periods..
I just veg. on tv which I really don't care for & rest..
you will be missed this week but you deserve some rest
your dedication to this can't be denied I too came in 2011
it's hard to believe we've been knowing & knocking about these halls seven years now..
love you JJ..
get some rest
& come back refreshed..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 6:35pm
Well of course you would say that Crim, you can't very well have me taking away your spot at the top of the chart from you, can we??? Lolololololol!!!!
HA! Yes, I notice you up there every month, confounding my every attempt to unseat he Queen of comments... Hat happened to David, he's slippin' on down? The lovely H is coming down the stretch lookin' like she is gonna pass you on the outside. Will she go to the whip and cross the finish line ahead of you? It's just about neck and neck. Will you be he winner by a nose once again, or will there be a new commenting Queen on DUP when January comes to a finish???
Lmao!!!!!!!
Thank you Brenda, your comment was refreshing all on it's own!
JJ
HA! Yes, I notice you up there every month, confounding my every attempt to unseat he Queen of comments... Hat happened to David, he's slippin' on down? The lovely H is coming down the stretch lookin' like she is gonna pass you on the outside. Will she go to the whip and cross the finish line ahead of you? It's just about neck and neck. Will you be he winner by a nose once again, or will there be a new commenting Queen on DUP when January comes to a finish???
Lmao!!!!!!!
Thank you Brenda, your comment was refreshing all on it's own!
JJ
Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 7:38pm
come back to us quickly dearest JJ your poetic voice
no matter how brief your absence will be missed in these halls..
love Raven
no matter how brief your absence will be missed in these halls..
love Raven
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Re: Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 7:48pm
My dear Raven, I'll be back so fast I will give you whiplash from the turn around...
Do you prefer leather or rawhide?
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jj
Do you prefer leather or rawhide?
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jj
Re: Re. a Quicky
4th Jan 2018 7:52pm
giggles i'm glad
but really i'm a softy
if I had to choose though
i'd say rawhide :)
love Raven
but really i'm a softy
if I had to choose though
i'd say rawhide :)
love Raven
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Re. a Quicky
5th Jan 2018 5:20am
We're all quirky in some way, we need that to be good writers.
Don't worry about needing a rest, we all do sometimes.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Don't worry about needing a rest, we all do sometimes.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Re: Re. a Quicky
5th Jan 2018 5:37am
The only trouble is, I need someone to knock me out so I can begin resting... lol
Hanks for commenting your lady shyness...
JJ
Hanks for commenting your lady shyness...
JJ
Re. a Quicky
9th Jan 2018 2:32am
I am coming round to your house to knock you out (lol) Rest is always good for recharging ones batteries
you certainly wont be forgotten my friend, especially with poems like this one
Rest well I will look forward to your return :-)))))
you certainly wont be forgotten my friend, especially with poems like this one
Rest well I will look forward to your return :-)))))
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Re: Re. a Quicky
9th Jan 2018 3:48am
I cheated and came back early. I barely made it through 2 days nd got all stressed out wondering what was going on... Sshhhh, don't tell anyone......... I'm hiding in the attic until security goes by.
JJ
JJ
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9th Jan 2018 4:41am
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11th Jan 2018 4:37am