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If You Want To Know
If you want to know why I have no faith in you
Take a look at my life, at the ruins you have left
When I thought you might be real, I left it in your hands
But that's when everything began to fall apart
When I still had hope is when it all went wrong
The bottom dropped out into a pit that fell to Hell
And I thought if there's a Hell, surely nirvana is above
A place beyond the pearly gates where souls rise when bodies die
But there's no evidence of happiness on Earth, no words from the sky
So if you want to know why people no longer believe in you
Take a look around at the dying world you claim to have made
Who would want to go to Heaven after living in this Godforsaken place
Knowing Earth's creator is up there in charge doing more of the same?
But where is this Utopia of yours hiding beyond the edge of space?
If you refuse to give us a clue I'd rather not leave it up to you
Give the job to me and I'll fix everything, I'll be the song that angels sing
Because I don't believe that Heaven is a place, but a gathering of souls
Who know no matter where they go after a lifetime of fucking each other over
There is a better way to co-exist even in a galaxy far, far away
Where a new hope rises with the celestial dawn burning away your shadow
As we become the pearls linking us in a necklace choking your arrogant throat
Take a look at my life, at the ruins you have left
When I thought you might be real, I left it in your hands
But that's when everything began to fall apart
When I still had hope is when it all went wrong
The bottom dropped out into a pit that fell to Hell
And I thought if there's a Hell, surely nirvana is above
A place beyond the pearly gates where souls rise when bodies die
But there's no evidence of happiness on Earth, no words from the sky
So if you want to know why people no longer believe in you
Take a look around at the dying world you claim to have made
Who would want to go to Heaven after living in this Godforsaken place
Knowing Earth's creator is up there in charge doing more of the same?
But where is this Utopia of yours hiding beyond the edge of space?
If you refuse to give us a clue I'd rather not leave it up to you
Give the job to me and I'll fix everything, I'll be the song that angels sing
Because I don't believe that Heaven is a place, but a gathering of souls
Who know no matter where they go after a lifetime of fucking each other over
There is a better way to co-exist even in a galaxy far, far away
Where a new hope rises with the celestial dawn burning away your shadow
As we become the pearls linking us in a necklace choking your arrogant throat
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Re. If You Want To Know
2nd Jan 2018 9:03pm
Entered in the Heaven comp @
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10047/#417306
JJ
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10047/#417306
JJ
Re. If You Want To Know
2nd Jan 2018 9:21pm
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2nd Jan 2018 9:29pm
Re. If You Want To Know
2nd Jan 2018 9:49pm
ooh JJ I freaking love this..
"As we become the pearls linking us in a necklace choking your arrogant throat"
i've often felt this way
about our creator..
fierce write..
love Brenda
"As we become the pearls linking us in a necklace choking your arrogant throat"
i've often felt this way
about our creator..
fierce write..
love Brenda
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Re: Re. If You Want To Know
3rd Jan 2018 8:29pm
Thanks Brenda! Glad you "freaking loved" it! A fierce comment from a fierce lady!!!
JJ
JJ
Re. If You Want To Know
2nd Jan 2018 9:50pm
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3rd Jan 2018 8:30pm
Re. If You Want To Know
2nd Jan 2018 10:11pm
Excellent piece! I very much enjoyed the Star Wars-esque lines toward the end ;)
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3rd Jan 2018 8:32pm
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3rd Jan 2018 1:22am
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Re. If You Want To Know
11th Jan 2018 3:14pm
Oh such bold truth in this ... had me cheering ... the last line is epic. Bravo my dear poet, bravo!
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Re: Re. If You Want To Know
11th Jan 2018 3:28pm
Thank you for commenting DragonFly!
I can hear your cheers all he way from here!
JJ
I can hear your cheers all he way from here!
JJ
Re. If You Want To Know
16th Jan 2018 11:03am
This was supposed to be aggravated murder right?just joking, really excellent work, god thou art!
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Re: Re. If You Want To Know
16th Jan 2018 12:55pm
Yeah, yeah, ha's the ticket...
It would take an angel to say that!
LoL!
Thanks for commenting Angeliki!
JJ
It would take an angel to say that!
LoL!
Thanks for commenting Angeliki!
JJ
Re. If You Want To Know
Anonymous
17th Jan 2018 10:43pm
Fierce JJ. Love it :)
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Re: Re. If You Want To Know
18th Jan 2018 8:37pm
So fiercely said Sophie... Out of the blue you come to kiss my poem and make me smile!
Thsnk you!!!
JJ
Thsnk you!!!
JJ
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Anonymous
19th Jan 2018 00:32am
I’ve been trying to play catch-up lately, turns out I’m not very good at that game lol.
Will happily leave kisses where they are deserved ;)
Will happily leave kisses where they are deserved ;)
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Re. If You Want To Know
15th Feb 2018 8:58am
If I had a creme rule I would have though so but this is just the real thing, I feel souls share a space in heaven where they rest and play,, butt I have to tell you heaven has visited me personally, I tell you its true, there is a god, because now every time zi look at a star, it moves in motions, and I have studied the names of these stars and the energies they project, and that's the. love I have for god. always committed, he is there. Now, I've got my own star energy. They move in their cultivation from their culmination, my job is to put them in their cultivation. That makes everyone happier with their own habitual environment. Pray, always pray!
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Re. If You Want To Know
22nd Feb 2018 00:25am
Re: Re. If You Want To Know
22nd Feb 2018 00:35am
Thanks for commenting Marielle! A very timely read considering the piece I posted today.
JJ
JJ