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The Taking
Kneeling
Waiting
Anticipation
Rising
Brutal strength of his passion
the force of his cock, coaxing her
to abandon
Fucking
Harder
Markings
Sweeter
Breaking her crumbling barrier
of resistance, she surrendered
without thought
Desire
Dripping
Abandonment
Inevitable
Freedom found … in the taking
Published 3rd Jan 2018
| Edited 5th Feb 2019
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3rd Jan 2018 12:22pm
3rd Jan 2018 12:52pm
Thank you Jade ... so very glad you could relate.
I always welcome your visits
~Wicked
I always welcome your visits
~Wicked
3rd Jan 2018 4:35pm
"Breaking her crumbling barrier
of resistance, she surrendered
without thought" <<< sexy lines!
Love the sensualness of your pen! :)
of resistance, she surrendered
without thought" <<< sexy lines!
Love the sensualness of your pen! :)
3rd Jan 2018 5:27pm
Thank you my dear Rain.
I am humbled by your words ... I am a big fan of your work, your pen is truly magical.
With deep appreciation
~Wicked
I am humbled by your words ... I am a big fan of your work, your pen is truly magical.
With deep appreciation
~Wicked
3rd Jan 2018 5:53pm
The taking... is oft found in the giving, there’s no doubt about that !
Surrender, is a gift to be cherished as liberation can be found in many ways ~ 🦋🌞🎈😎🌹👑🌈
Surrender, is a gift to be cherished as liberation can be found in many ways ~ 🦋🌞🎈😎🌹👑🌈
3rd Jan 2018 6:00pm
“The taking... is oft found in the giving, ”
So very true ... without the giving, the taking could not be given freely. It must be a two way street ... otherwise I would call it abuse
Thank you for your comment, and your visit
~Wicked
So very true ... without the giving, the taking could not be given freely. It must be a two way street ... otherwise I would call it abuse
Thank you for your comment, and your visit
~Wicked
3rd Jan 2018 7:33pm
Whew! Amazing writing, and sinfully hot! The tempo of this work absolutely is thrusting and fierce. The staccato cadence of the single words between the ravaging descriptive lines is masterful.
And, did I mention it's hot??!
And, did I mention it's hot??!
My sweet PL, your comments are a poem in and of itself. I always welcome your comments and your visits ... it’s been too long.
Always
~Wickec
Always
~Wickec
4th Jan 2018 4:18am
yassssssssss beautifully written... i know this feeling all too well... keep up the good work Wicked!!! check out my new work.. spread the word and stay blessed.
4th Jan 2018 4:32am
Thank you for your comments, and your visit.
I am pleased to know that you can relate.
Will check out your work
~Wicked
I am pleased to know that you can relate.
Will check out your work
~Wicked
Anonymous
- Edited 5th Jan 2018 6:24am
5th Jan 2018 6:23am
Hmmmm
The taking. That would be interesting. Great first step.
Beth
The taking. That would be interesting. Great first step.
Beth
My dear Beth,
So happy that you recognize “ the taking,” as the first step ... next step would be, “ the possessing,” ultimately leading to “ total power exchange” ... of course this would be mutual
Your comments and visits are always welcome
~ Wicked
So happy that you recognize “ the taking,” as the first step ... next step would be, “ the possessing,” ultimately leading to “ total power exchange” ... of course this would be mutual
Your comments and visits are always welcome
~ Wicked
7th Jan 2018 2:58pm
Love the quick crispness of the short lines in this. The beat is dominating, unmistakable. "Freedom found ... in the taking" - this is such a perfect pithy description of it all. For me, the tighter the binds or the less in control in any way, the freer I feel.
Thank you my sweet Dragonfly
I am certain that you knew exactly where I was coming from ... it is so refreshing to find someone who connects with my words.
Thank you for your comments, and the visit
~Wicked
I am certain that you knew exactly where I was coming from ... it is so refreshing to find someone who connects with my words.
Thank you for your comments, and the visit
~Wicked
Anonymous
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5th Feb 2018 7:19am
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8th Feb 2018 6:12am
My dear Avalon, thank you for your kind words.
In terms of your poem ... I would enjoy reading it ... sounds like we are on the same frequency, just different sides of the whip ;)
Thank you for the visit, it’s much appreciated
~Wicked
In terms of your poem ... I would enjoy reading it ... sounds like we are on the same frequency, just different sides of the whip ;)
Thank you for the visit, it’s much appreciated
~Wicked
