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'Reekin' of Night'
In the pit
of stomach
couldn't feel it...
Unsteady beats
of heart
never, revealed
a hit...
Soul's depth
surely should've
Unveiled, what sailed
straight across the eyes...
So begins a new trek
overwrought with the
burden of carryin'
a mountain, weighted
by a vast amount
of tears' cries...
Albeit the former glow
a forgotten sideshow
extinguished like a fire
once the life pulse dies...
Published 1st Jan 2018
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1st Jan 2018 11:56pm
2nd Jan 2018 00:08am
2nd Jan 2018 1:28am
Lovely stuff, Poetikmind, it makes me feel as if you are real. Don't give up or in. Keep the beat steady and always be on the ready (sorry).
2nd Jan 2018 1:42am
Makes u feel as if I'm real? I assure you I can't be realer..but I do thank u...appreciate the support always
2nd Jan 2018 1:59am
No, you are real for sure, I was just putting you into my state of mind. I'm feeling a little out of here. I love your work (I'm such a jerk).
2nd Jan 2018 3:12am
2nd Jan 2018 3:50am
A sadness.. within this atmospheric dark beauty..
Quite nice..
Lovee<3<3<3
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Quite nice..
Lovee<3<3<3
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2nd Jan 2018 1:57pm
2nd Jan 2018 2:22pm
this made my heart beat in my throat... such visceral darkness, the burden so palpable.
your pen is incredible papi
your pen is incredible papi
2nd Jan 2018 2:51pm
Yea, this is one of those 'offline' pieces I more often don't share online... it sure why I slipped up n posted this lol...
Anyways, deeply grateful for ur undying support mami... :)
Anyways, deeply grateful for ur undying support mami... :)
2nd Jan 2018 4:39pm
A universal wall relationships seem to slam into at one time or another, although to each one it is uniquely traumatic. I’m glad for both your resilience and your resolve. That is how one survives. Keep on, friend.
3rd Jan 2018 11:17am
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4th Jan 2018 10:58pm
Nah, I'm usually too much of a damn dreamer to do that lol... Thank u so much for ur thoughts n support sweetness. :)
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4th Jan 2018 7:25am
Heavy burden of darkness indeed... Sad but as always -beautiful <3
4th Jan 2018 11:01pm
Yea I'm sorry bout the weight, had to drop it somewhere though... but I glad u still liked it my dearest. Truly n always grateful. :)
5th Jan 2018 10:31pm
5th Jan 2018 11:14pm
6th Jan 2018 2:14pm
Was it how you started your new years? Hope it was just from a dramastic soap opera...
My dear Ric, Happy New Year! Be happy all the way throught this year and the next years...
much love RoseJasmine
My dear Ric, Happy New Year! Be happy all the way throught this year and the next years...
much love RoseJasmine
9th Jan 2018 11:58pm
Gosh I missed this somehow... no it wasn't
but hey it can turn at the drop of a dime lol... thank u my dear RJ, ur too sweet n I appreciate you bunches :)
but hey it can turn at the drop of a dime lol... thank u my dear RJ, ur too sweet n I appreciate you bunches :)
Anonymous
7th Jan 2018 3:06pm
a present-day feminine me hun ,
as salt fills my mouth..
touching
as salt fills my mouth..
touching
7th Jan 2018 3:22pm
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10th Jan 2018 00:01am
Gosh you sweetie pie you just gave me a huge smile! Thank you, I'm very grateful as always for your thoughts n your support. :)
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