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The Usual
Man is OK.
has money.
has apartment.
Signs the papers.
Shakes the hands...
Man is dreaming.
He is dreaming.
He signs the papers.
Shakes the hands.
Takes the sip.
He's waking up.
"This is my day."
Signs papers.
Shakes hands.
Takes the sip.
And he hopes..
"Today's the day."
He's waking up.
Signs the last paper,
Shakes the last hand,
Takes his sip.
Man takes a trip.
Makes a slit.
Man woke up.
has money.
has apartment.
Signs the papers.
Shakes the hands...
Man is dreaming.
He is dreaming.
He signs the papers.
Shakes the hands.
Takes the sip.
He's waking up.
"This is my day."
Signs papers.
Shakes hands.
Takes the sip.
And he hopes..
"Today's the day."
He's waking up.
Signs the last paper,
Shakes the last hand,
Takes his sip.
Man takes a trip.
Makes a slit.
Man woke up.
Published 23rd Sep 2011
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23rd Sep 2011 7:25am
I like this one. I'm not normally a fan of such strong repetition (it doesn't easily lend itself to having much to say) but it works well here, as obviously that's what you're trying to emphasize. I do like the sort of trippy feel of the repeated lines before and after times the person is supposed to have woken up--and even the repetition of supposedly waking up, further throwing into doubt each time he does. My one question is why OK is underlined in the first line?
