Unzip My Unease

The first half is very curious and mysterious, perhaps a private message to the muse of the poem, the second half relays the longing the inspirer is filled with. Makes me want more but perhaps the one you wrote it for knows very well...
JJ

Thank you PM! :) I've read a few like this lately and felt like submitting one myself. Short little porms are managable, and engaging. That's all I'll say hehe ;)

JJ said it so well... I feel the hidden secrets tucked away, perhaps longing to be revealed. For such a short message, I am left gripping at your words.

Thank you <3

you're a gem, kid.......

Thanks Daniel! You're like my DUP uncle 😊

everybody needs a dopey uncle....uncle dada loves you.

Powerpacked as a direct look that says so much without a word.

AtoMik.. such depth.. simply brilliant.. much respect..

























Dave

I like the structure of the first and third stanza, pivoting on the single line second stanza, with that line in italics for emphasis.

The first stanza comes across as slinkly flirty, with "undulate" and "slipped you a glimpse"

The third is more reproachful, with a sense of self-irritation and self-berating. Playing hard to get when "yours" clearly wants "in".

Yes, exactly! :) I'm a little less than pleased with myself, you could say.

You seem well versed (pun intended) in poetic workings.  Thank you for sharing your insight with me!