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I DONT REMEMBER!
I remember the pray but I don't remembers the words
My songs doesn't know, who sung them
I knocked the door of my beloved with my eyelids
I'm the questioner who doesn't know about his questions
I suffuses my blood for those people
Now they are saying they don't remember the fulfilment promises
I remember the faint stars when they twinkles often
Who become sad at that time I don't remember
Being with you I lived my life like a prisoner
From which crime I got this punishment I don't remember
Let's bow down by focusing in the trance
Who is saying naveed forgets the GOD
My songs doesn't know, who sung them
I knocked the door of my beloved with my eyelids
I'm the questioner who doesn't know about his questions
I suffuses my blood for those people
Now they are saying they don't remember the fulfilment promises
I remember the faint stars when they twinkles often
Who become sad at that time I don't remember
Being with you I lived my life like a prisoner
From which crime I got this punishment I don't remember
Let's bow down by focusing in the trance
Who is saying naveed forgets the GOD
Published 14th Dec 2017
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16th Dec 2017 10:42am
once again, welcome to DU dear bro,
this
appears to be a translated version of a Ghazal,
good job, it needs a bit of tidying up as some minor typos and grammatical errors are distorting the meaning.
for example the first couplet in edited version would be
I remember the prayers but I don't remember the words
My songs don't know, who sung them
this
appears to be a translated version of a Ghazal,
good job, it needs a bit of tidying up as some minor typos and grammatical errors are distorting the meaning.
for example the first couplet in edited version would be
I remember the prayers but I don't remember the words
My songs don't know, who sung them
16th Dec 2017 11:37am
Thanks for checking me out! Well I will work on typos, grammatical errors and tidying...
