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Abortion
A pregnant woman can do as she likes, yes, I too believe
In a woman`s right; but a pregnant woman has the responsibility
of a new life growing inside her and it is paramount that
the beginning of life has the right to be born.
It is often single, uneducated women who get into the predicament
instead of making her into a killer, we should help to give her
economic help so she and her child can live with dignity.
Women who are busy breaking the glass ceiling when finding
themselves pregnant have an abortion as a matter of course, and
in the name of success commit murder.
I`m also against adoption it is a capitalist invention, take from the poor
and give it to the rich, and it is of no help, as the birth mother will regret it
and the child when an adult will ask, why did my mother give me away?
A pregnant woman can do as she likes, yes, I too believe
In a woman`s right; but a pregnant woman has the responsibility
of a new life growing inside her and it is paramount that
the beginning of life has the right to be born.
It is often single, uneducated women who get into the predicament
instead of making her into a killer, we should help to give her
economic help so she and her child can live with dignity.
Women who are busy breaking the glass ceiling when finding
themselves pregnant have an abortion as a matter of course, and
in the name of success commit murder.
I`m also against adoption it is a capitalist invention, take from the poor
and give it to the rich, and it is of no help, as the birth mother will regret it
and the child when an adult will ask, why did my mother give me away?
Published 2nd Dec 2017
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16th Mar 2018 9:22pm
It's hard for me to comment on poetry with controversial topics because the debater in me loves to come out to play at times, devil's advocate and all.
I like that you used poetry to speak your heart, though. Your message is clear, which is good for the average reader, and it reads a lot like prose more than poetry, but some poetry is like that. There is a certain catch--the good kind--at the end of some of the lines where a rhyme occurs, and it's these little hints that seem to open it to the label of poetry (versus prose).
One recommendation on something to change, though: the first line is a bit awkward to me. There are missing commas in the "I too believe", but since the rest of your piece has more straight-forward, traditional 'speaking', I would recommend changing the grammar of the first sentence so that it reads like someone would normally speak, which will make it in keeping with the rest of your piece.
Otherwise, nice work.
I like that you used poetry to speak your heart, though. Your message is clear, which is good for the average reader, and it reads a lot like prose more than poetry, but some poetry is like that. There is a certain catch--the good kind--at the end of some of the lines where a rhyme occurs, and it's these little hints that seem to open it to the label of poetry (versus prose).
One recommendation on something to change, though: the first line is a bit awkward to me. There are missing commas in the "I too believe", but since the rest of your piece has more straight-forward, traditional 'speaking', I would recommend changing the grammar of the first sentence so that it reads like someone would normally speak, which will make it in keeping with the rest of your piece.
Otherwise, nice work.
