Unbending

AtoMik.. simply brilliant as always..

























Dave

Now this is what i call poetry...mama likes

Nice !

Thank you guys :)

I would love to pick out and show you my favourite part, but I love all of it..

Thank you! :)

"Held by a thumbnail
draining white
& butane effaces
itself to flame "- fetching as the flame, with moths to find the fire you spill. i think of lighters and pouring a bottle of butane over the living room table and catching it on fire.

"with darkened light shading"- this line takes me to the local art museum.i took my mom to an exhibit there once; there was a gigantic sheet of  paper shaded entirely with pencil..my mom kept touching it and rubbing a bit off...she almost got us kicked out lol.

"peering
through lawless pockets "- this takes me to Butch Cassidy,the  Wild Bunch and the Hole-in-the-wall; i'd like to visit there someday

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hole-in-the-Wall


killer write
honest critique...i wouldn't change a thing.

Oh my gosh, that's hilarious! 🤣 At least as poets, our stuff can't really be rubbed away slowly...I mean, I shouldn't laugh...but that is darkly funny!

I always look forward to your impressions of stuff, it's a hoot! This was particularly interesting today man, good stuff!

wonderfuel :-)))))))))

I caught that man... 😉 Thank you haha!

yr too 'good' at this,  Wish i 'had' someone who thinks like you in these last alonesome hours.........but what's writ by someone oft translates rather differently in the illusion of what's generally perceived as Real Life.

Dude, thanks Daniel! :)