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Conquered Valhalla
the inflection in your voice
is hypnotizing
its mellow base
thrums in my chest
as you whisper
the dirty deeds
you wish to perform
upon willing flesh
moon kissed
& wanton
at our silk draped table
toes playfully seek
hardened thick
a menacing look
tells me i will pay later
finally alone
you tear clothes
from my trembling form
& quench your thirst
drinking from rose buds
peaked & hungry
for your experienced touch
searching fingers
find me slick with desire
a quiet hiss of displeasure
escapes your mouth
to find me already so close
fierce eyes pin me down
your force of will
penetrates me
before you are ever loosed
upon on ravenous flesh
a moan escapes lips
kissed & bruised
then a quick intake of breath
as steel is felt
piercing my velvet pink
with rhythmic movement
you pound out your need
inside the walls of my Valhalla
while i succumb
to your conquering member
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Re. Conquered Valhalla
30th Nov 2017 8:22pm
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30th Nov 2017 8:37pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
30th Nov 2017 8:39pm
Vivid.
Visceral.
Violent.
Evocative.
Some hard-hitting verse.
By the way, noticed a couple typos, but all-in-all, a very enjoyable poem.
Visceral.
Violent.
Evocative.
Some hard-hitting verse.
By the way, noticed a couple typos, but all-in-all, a very enjoyable poem.
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
thank you dearest Obsessed One most graciously for the awesome critique & the heads up I think I caught them..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Conquered Valhalla
30th Nov 2017 8:52pm
Oh my oh my ... Oden is breathless, savoring his own la petite mort ... hot dampening write my dear.
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
30th Nov 2017 9:00pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Nov 2017 9:18pm
30th Nov 2017 9:17pm
oh gawd
mmmm mm mmm
youve made me hungry
ouw!
💘
mmmm mm mmm
youve made me hungry
ouw!
💘
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30th Nov 2017 9:21pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
30th Nov 2017 10:07pm
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30th Nov 2017 10:25pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
Anonymous
1st Dec 2017 00:52am
Beautiful one, this is such a sensual and powerful poem. I adore the title in connection to the words. Love love love this one, my lovely Dark Angel and I love you...Willow
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
1st Dec 2017 6:44pm
thank you lovely one I am beaming from your comment.. it was our beautiful one that titled this :)
love you..
love Brenda
love you..
love Brenda
Re. Conquered Valhalla
Anonymous
1st Dec 2017 2:52am
My love...this ink was splendid and had me all sorts of squirmy while reading...visions of you just dancing in my head tickling every sensitive spot I own...so many dreamy lines I can't even tell you my favorite...they all affect me in different spots, ltm...
I love you madly
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
I love you madly
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
1st Dec 2017 6:47pm
thank you my love the love you've shown this write.. you know you influence me & have taught me quite a bit in the way of beautiful erotics.. so I couldn't have written this without your guidance..
I love you madly..
love Brenda
I love you madly..
love Brenda
Re. Conquered Valhalla
Anonymous
1st Dec 2017 2:56am
Ahh to be conquered.
*find me slick with desire
a quiet hiss of displeasure
escapes your mouth
to find me already so close *
Fng intense. To stare into his eyes finding you close
Displeased you were impatient
Taking control to tell you,
Not until he allows you to.
I surrender
B
*find me slick with desire
a quiet hiss of displeasure
escapes your mouth
to find me already so close *
Fng intense. To stare into his eyes finding you close
Displeased you were impatient
Taking control to tell you,
Not until he allows you to.
I surrender
B
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
1st Dec 2017 6:48pm
yes sigh beautiful Lady B
by a man that exudes power & dominance
no greater turn on to me..
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
thank you..
love Crim
by a man that exudes power & dominance
no greater turn on to me..
I deeply cherish your thoughts
& visits to my pages..
thank you..
love Crim
Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
1st Dec 2017 6:49pm
Anonymous
- Edited 31st Aug 2018 2:45pm
1st Dec 2017 3:58pm
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1st Dec 2017 6:50pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
1st Dec 2017 5:26pm
wow, how to set the mood, as a trickle of sweat rolls down my back, amazing work
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1st Dec 2017 6:50pm
Re. Conquered Valhalla
2nd Dec 2017 00:34am
This has left me in a pleasant rush of sensational feels..
Gracious words as always and very, very nice read it is..
Love it
H
Gracious words as always and very, very nice read it is..
Love it
H
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Re: Re. Conquered Valhalla
2nd Dec 2017 1:31am
thank you beautiful H you always gift me smiles with your thoughts & visit :)
love Crim
love Crim
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3rd Dec 2017 1:02am
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3rd Dec 2017 1:07am
Re. Conquered Valhalla
10th Dec 2017 7:13pm
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10th Dec 2017 7:41pm
giggles thank you dearest Samuel
your sexy comment brightened my day :)
love Crim
your sexy comment brightened my day :)
love Crim
Re. Conquered Valhalla
Anonymous
13th Dec 2017 7:13pm
Crim, from beginning to end, so much desire !!!
A rousing SKOL from this Viking !!
A rousing SKOL from this Viking !!
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13th Dec 2017 8:02pm