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the railway track
there
lay the body
on the railway track
the railway track
no face no race
unrecognizable
only the trousers
those were black
there
lay the body
on the railway track
the railway track
he chose his passing
at the railway crossing
why on earth why
the retrievers wail 'n cry
there
lay the body
on the railway track
the railway track
no face no race
just the trousers black
dead men give no answers
neither do mystic dancers
nor those ones the lancers
nor the apathetic glancers
there
lay the body
Published 16th Nov 2017
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16th Nov 2017 1:34am
16th Nov 2017 1:39am
in life
things happen.
many questions
remain.
welcome
is the peer
the review.
appreciated.
deeply.
things happen.
many questions
remain.
welcome
is the peer
the review.
appreciated.
deeply.
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Jan 2023 2:45pm
16th Nov 2017 2:14am
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16th Nov 2017 2:24am
welcome
is the per Admired
and the review.
even your reviews
are not without
your trademark rhythm AH!
Yes,
some choose
to take the answers
with them
leaving a trail
of burning questions
in their wake.
is the per Admired
and the review.
even your reviews
are not without
your trademark rhythm AH!
Yes,
some choose
to take the answers
with them
leaving a trail
of burning questions
in their wake.
Many have traveled those tracks and as the train grows smaller in the distance, would be passengers and farewell wavers find only questions strewn along the rails, for the answers are aboard the train missed.
16th Nov 2017 4:16am
indeed.
"for the answers are aboard the train missed"
you reduced the page long work to a line.
wise Soul!
events such as these, at the tracks
leave behind the depth
of undersea trench
on the hearts of all concerned.
"for the answers are aboard the train missed"
you reduced the page long work to a line.
wise Soul!
events such as these, at the tracks
leave behind the depth
of undersea trench
on the hearts of all concerned.
16th Nov 2017 5:23am
Many times, like this, one line may say one thing, but many lines are needed to convey the message.
"leave behind the depth
of undersea trench
on the hearts of all concerned"
The message the one line does not cover.
The friend, peer, and poet's words speak much better the questions.
"leave behind the depth
of undersea trench
on the hearts of all concerned"
The message the one line does not cover.
The friend, peer, and poet's words speak much better the questions.
16th Nov 2017 5:29am
it is purely
the company
of Wise Souls!
nothing else,
for they possess the depth
of insight
and affection
unparalleled
:-)
the company
of Wise Souls!
nothing else,
for they possess the depth
of insight
and affection
unparalleled
:-)
16th Nov 2017 10:24am
Incredibly dark piece of poetry, very real. Eloquently written.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
19th Nov 2017 1:00am
welcome
is the peer
admired
and
the review
honoring.
relaity
is sometimes
too dark.
is the peer
admired
and
the review
honoring.
relaity
is sometimes
too dark.
Anonymous
17th Nov 2017 00:28am
Your fusions
are cold ...
such a dire
lullaby
for the man
on the track
and I bet he never
looked back
or else
he wouldn`t
be lying
on the track
excellent!
19th Nov 2017 00:58am
fusions
for times old
times cold....
welcome
is the peer
admired
as well as
the review
both
appreciated
immensely.
true,
look back he couldn't/didn't
otherwise
he won't be
he chose his passing
the railway crossing.
for times old
times cold....
welcome
is the peer
admired
as well as
the review
both
appreciated
immensely.
true,
look back he couldn't/didn't
otherwise
he won't be
he chose his passing
the railway crossing.
Anonymous
19th Nov 2017 9:14pm
Touché
